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Some people prefer to live in a house, while others think that there are more advantages living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages to living in a house rather than in an apartment? v.4

Some people prefer to live in a house, while others think that there are more advantages living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages to living in a house rather than in an apartment? v. 4
It is a debatable issue when it comes to choose house or apartment; every aspects have their own benefits. Although few of us prefer to live in house, majority of us love to live in apartment these days due to several reasons, and I prefer to live in apartment as well, and will explain my views in further paragraphs. To embark on, population and cost of living are increasing day-by-day exponentially. A stand-alone house is no longer affordable to vast of citizens. That is why people are moving towards apartments. Apart from this, there are several other benefits. Firstly, the maintenance of a house is neither so easy nor so pocket friendly for middle class people. In apartment, all of our monthly maintenance charges and efforts are divided among the society members. Secondly, security is a major concern for all house owners, especially in India. As several people are staying near to each other in apartment, the chances of theft is very low; anybody can notice any unusual movement or unauthorized person entered into the society, which is little bit difficult in independent houses. Moreover, apartment can afford security guards in addition to installation of surveillance cameras, as per head contribution would be nominal. Lastly, various occasions can celebrated in an apartment in more enjoyable ways in comparison to staying in houses. For instance, Holi -a well-known festival in India, can only be enjoyed with a group of people, which not possible in house, at least not at large scale. However, staying at home has some own beauty. One can organize any function or festival without others approval or concern, whereas in apartment one must inform his/her neighbor; otherwise he/she may complain due to noise. Another advantage is that we can plan additional activities such as gardening if one possess an independent house, which is restricted in apartment. To recapitulate, although individual houses have few advantages, the merits in staying at apartment such as cost effectiveness, sense of security and enjoyment during festival time have outnumbered the idea to live in house.
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to choose
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house
or
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apartment
; every
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aspects
have their
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own
benefits. Although few of us prefer to
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live
in
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house
,
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majority of
us
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love
to
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live
in
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apartment
these days due to several reasons, and I prefer to
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live
in
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apartment
as well
, and will
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explain
my views in
further
paragraphs.

To embark on, population and cost of living are increasing day-by-day
exponentially
. A stand-alone
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house
is no longer affordable to vast of citizens.
That is
why
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people
are moving towards
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apartments
. Apart from this, there are several other benefits.
Firstly
, the maintenance of a
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house
is neither
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so
easy nor
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so
pocket friendly for middle
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class
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people
. In
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apartment
, all of our monthly maintenance charges and efforts
are divided
among the society members.
Secondly
, security is a major concern for all
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house
owners,
especially
in India. As several
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people
are
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staying
near to each other in
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apartment
, the chances of theft is
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very
low; anybody can notice any unusual movement or unauthorized person entered into the society, which is
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little bit
difficult in independent
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houses
.
Moreover
,
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apartment
can afford security guards
in addition
to installation of surveillance cameras, as per head contribution would be nominal.
Lastly
, various occasions can celebrated in an
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apartment
in more enjoyable ways
in comparison
to
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staying
in
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houses
.
For instance
,
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Holi
-a well-known festival in India, can
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only
be enjoyed
with a group of
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people
, which not possible in
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house
, at least not at large scale.

However
,
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staying
at home has
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some
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own
beauty. One can organize any function or festival without others approval or concern, whereas in
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apartment
one
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must
inform his/her neighbor;
otherwise
he/she may complain due to noise. Another advantage is that we can plan additional activities such as gardening if one possess an independent
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house
, which
is restricted
in apartment.

To recapitulate, although individual
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houses
have few advantages, the merits in
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staying
at
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apartment
such as
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cost effectiveness
, sense of security and enjoyment during festival time have outnumbered the
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idea
to
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live
in
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house
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people prefer to live in a house, while others think that there are more advantages living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages to living in a house rather than in an apartment? v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
342 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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