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Some people prefer to live in a house, while others think that there are more advantages living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages to living in a house rather than in an apartment? v.1

Some people prefer to live in a house, while others think that there are more advantages living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages to living in a house rather than in an apartment? v. 1
Over the years buildings has come in a variety of styles, shape and design such that living in either a house or an apartment has become a debate. Some people in the rural area will prefer living in houses compared to people in the cities who will most likely argue that apartments are better and easier to own. For apartments, one very big advantage is the optimization of space and this is mostly common in big cities. Apartments accommodate a larger population, basic amenities such as water, electricity are shared consequently reducing cost. However, the chance that it will be prone to overcrowding is very high. Accidents like fire outbreak have a high risk of fatalities evident in some fire incident that occurred some years ago in London and Dubai. People who live in houses, especially those in the rural area or country side as it is called in some countries would say there is nothing like space constraint, the house could include a courtyard or a garden and other outdoor areas. The ambience is more natural and there is a reasonable privacy compared to apartment. However, the occupant will be solely responsible for the cost of maintenance and provision of basic amenities. Imagine how expensive it will be to own a house in the city. In conclusion, it all depend on which area is being considered, if it is in a city, it is more economical and easier to live in an apartment. If in the countryside, it is likely that living in a house will be of more benefit.
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in a variety of styles, shape and design such that living in either a
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house
or an
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apartment
has become a debate.
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people
in the rural
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area
will prefer living in
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houses
compared to
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people
in the cities who will most likely argue that
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apartments
are better and easier to
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own
.

For
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, one
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very
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big
advantage is the optimization of space and this is
mostly
common in
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big
cities.
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Apartments
accommodate a larger population, basic amenities such as water, electricity
are shared
consequently
reducing cost.
However
, the chance that it will be prone to overcrowding is
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very
high. Accidents like fire outbreak have a high
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risk
of fatalities evident in
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some
fire incident that occurred
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years ago in London and Dubai.

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who
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live
in
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houses
,
especially
those in the rural
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area
or country side as it
is called
in
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some
countries would say there is nothing like space constraint, the
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house
could include a courtyard or a garden and other outdoor
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areas
. The ambience is more natural and there is a reasonable privacy compared to
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apartment
.
However
, the occupant will be
solely
responsible for the cost of maintenance and provision of basic amenities. Imagine how expensive it will be to
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own
a
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house
in the city.

In conclusion
, it all depend on which
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area
is
being considered
, if it is in a city, it is more economical and easier to
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live
in an
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apartment
. If in the countryside, it is likely that living in a
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house
will be of more benefit.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people prefer to live in a house, while others think that there are more advantages living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages to living in a house rather than in an apartment? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
261 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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