some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programs (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children) To what extend do you agree or disagree v.1
some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programs (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children) v. 1
Nowadays, some students those who are studying at an advanced level, such as a university or college wish to provide volunteer services, and it should be the necessary work. I agree with the above statements by considering some factors.
In general, after completing secondary educations, they are attending to the higher study, and they also will be able to build up the pleasant environment to be explored the world. Moreover, they are able to realise what they need to do something on behalf of the society. Consequently, they are trying to help them out. For instance, Organizing some seminars for the poor students, cleaning the environment, and etc.
People, on the other hand, believe the high school students have much knowledge about the country as well as the government, so they are able to gather many persons for volunteer works. Moreover, community ready to pay attention to them as well. They have a good advantage to be successful as an organization by taking these resources.
To conclude, The students those who are doing higher study, so they have good awareness and good environment to be organized the programmes. Furthermore, People believe their ability and the power of youth due to those facts. People always assume unpaid programs have been the compulsory part of the high school.
Nowadays,
some
students
those who are studying at an advanced level, such as a university or college wish to provide volunteer services, and it should be the necessary work. I
agree
with the above statements by considering
some
factors.
In general
, after completing secondary educations, they are attending to the higher study, and they
also
will be able to build up the pleasant environment to
be explored
the world.
Moreover
, they are able to
realise
what they need to do something on behalf of the society.
Consequently
, they are trying to
help
them out.
For instance
, Organizing
some
seminars for the poor
students
, cleaning the environment,
and etc
.
People
,
on the other hand
, believe the high school
students
have much knowledge about the country
as well
as the
government
,
so
they are able to gather
many
persons for volunteer works.
Moreover
, community ready to pay attention to them
as well
. They have a
good
advantage to be successful as an organization by taking these resources.
To conclude
, The
students
those who are doing higher study,
so
they have
good
awareness and
good
environment to
be organized
the
programmes
.
Furthermore
,
People
believe their ability and the power of youth due to those facts.
People
always assume unpaid programs have been the compulsory part of the high school.
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4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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