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Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment? v.25

Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment? v. 25
Being a controversial subject among people, whether or not living in a private house outweighs being settled in an apartment, is not an easy decision. In this essay, the pros and cons of both these ways of living are going to be discussed. People living in a house benefit their privacy as they do not have any neighbours in their place to share some areas like staircases or corridors. Besides, having a desirable garden could be a marked characteristic for individuals being interested in gardening and or providing a sufficient play area for their offspring and pets. Despite a variety of merits, possessing a house could embody some sort of difficulties ranging from low security to some extra maintaining expenses. On the other hand, thanks to expanding the state-of-the-art lifestyle in the multitude of cities, especially the mega cities, living in an apartment is going to be more convenient because of some advantages. The main merit is that living in an apartment contributes to being more secured in comparison with a house, as the inhabitants need to take care of just one entrance and building guards provide higher security for the owners, as well. Low independence feeling, however, could be mentioned as the most significant drawback of a flat in a building, particularly towers. In conclusion, all things considered, both circumstances of living possess their own plus and minus points. Nevertheless, I somewhat concur that due to the modern way of life in which plenty of people live, living in an apartment could be more profitable with regard to the level of security and lower cost of maintenance of property and some probable repairing issues.
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people
,
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whether or not
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living
in a private
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house
outweighs
being settled
in an
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apartment
, is not an easy decision. In this essay, the pros and cons of both these ways of
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living
are going to
be discussed
.

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People
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living
in a
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house
benefit their privacy as they do not have any
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neighbours
in their place to share
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some
areas like staircases or corridors.
Besides
, having a desirable garden could be a marked characteristic for individuals
being interested
in gardening and or providing a sufficient play area for their offspring and pets. Despite a variety of merits, possessing a
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house
could embody
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some
sort of difficulties ranging from low security to
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some
extra maintaining expenses.

On the other hand
, thanks to expanding the state-of-the-art lifestyle in the multitude of cities,
especially
the mega cities,
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living
in an
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apartment
is going to be more convenient
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because
of
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some
advantages. The main merit is that
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living
in an
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apartment
contributes to being more secured
in comparison
with a
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house
, as the inhabitants need to take care of
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just
one entrance and building guards provide higher security for the owners,
as well
. Low independence feeling,
however
, could
be mentioned
as the most significant drawback of a flat in a building,
particularly
towers.

In conclusion
, all things considered, both circumstances of
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living
possess their
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own
plus and minus points.
Nevertheless
, I somewhat concur that due to the modern way of life in which
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plenty
of
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people
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live
,
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living
in an
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apartment
could be more profitable with regard to the level of security and lower cost of maintenance of property and
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some
probable repairing issues.
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15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment? v. 25

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
275 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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