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Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phones, online games, and social networking website. v.2

Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phones, online games, and social networking website. v. 2
Nowadays, thanks to modernisation, the method of teaching has changed considerably compared with decades ago. Developments have led students to spend more time on a variety of electronic communication devices and to become less flexible when it comes to learning lessons at school. However, I personally believe that the overall quality of learning has been fundamentally improved. On one hand, in the past, teaching children was far simpler. One reason is that they did not have any access to other study resources. They had to follow their instructors’ rules to learn from theoretical and practical materials instead of using the Internet. For example, to learn English, students mostly used school laboratories and only listened to materials recommended by their teacher.   Now, students can listen and participate in hundreds of online courses through the web, each with different strategies which often confuse learners.   Another issue is that cyber-addiction has lead children to spend less time studying their basic books. Playing video games, which are upgraded every month, chatting on Facebook or texting friends mean children find less opportunity to study and practice their lessons. On the other hand, some social networks and telecommunication systems are extremely useful to children. The primary factor is online learning which has become a popular method of teaching in many countries. For instance, to learn biology, children can search and find a variety of topics on the web in few seconds, or download their favourite video lessons by paying a very modest amount of money. Tutors, therefore, spend only a few hours teaching the related subjects in school. Furthermore, social networks have assisted pupils in understanding the materials better. Obviously, in many schools, colleges or even universities, students are encouraged to create study groups and participate in discussions, collecting information far more easily than in the past. In particular, at MIT in the USA, students have private accounts and can connect to any other student in the US university system.   This gives them access to a far wider range of materials, ideas and approaches to data than learning in the past. In conclusion, although children had more time to study classroom materials in the past, now they get a better quality of teaching. In my view, online learning and participating in vast educational study groups has led them to learn than in the past.
Nowadays, thanks to
modernisation
, the method of
teaching
has
changed
considerably
compared with decades ago. Developments have led
students
to spend more time on a variety of electronic communication devices and to become less flexible when it
comes
to
learning
lessons at
school
.
However
, I
personally
believe that the
overall
quality of
learning
has been
fundamentally
improved
.

On one hand, in the
past
,
teaching
children
was far simpler. One reason is that they did not have any access to other
study
resources. They had to follow their instructors’
rules
to
learn
from theoretical and practical
materials
instead
of using the Internet.
For example
, to
learn
English,
students
mostly
used
school
laboratories and
only
listened to
materials
recommended by their teacher.
 
Now
,
students
can listen and participate in hundreds of online courses through the web, each with
different
strategies which
often
confuse learners.
 
Another issue is that cyber-addiction has lead
children
to spend less time studying their basic books. Playing video games, which
are upgraded
every month, chatting on Facebook or texting friends mean
children
find less opportunity to
study
and practice their lessons.

On the other hand
,
some
social networks and telecommunication systems are
extremely
useful to
children
. The primary factor is online
learning
which has become a popular method of
teaching
in
many
countries.
For instance
, to
learn
biology,
children
can search and find a variety of topics on the web in few seconds, or download their
favourite
video lessons by paying a
very
modest amount of money. Tutors,
therefore
, spend
only
a few hours
teaching
the related subjects in
school
.
Furthermore
, social networks have assisted pupils in understanding the
materials
better.
Obviously
, in
many
schools
, colleges or even universities,
students
are encouraged
to create
study
groups and participate in discussions, collecting information far more
easily
than in the
past
.
In particular
, at MIT in the USA,
students
have private accounts and can connect to any other
student
in the US university system.
 
This gives them access to a far wider range of
materials
,
ideas
and approaches to data than
learning
in the past.

In conclusion
, although
children
had more time to
study
classroom
materials
in the
past
,
now
they
get
a better quality of
teaching
. In my view, online
learning
and participating in vast educational
study
groups has led them to
learn
than in the
past
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
44Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phones, online games, and social networking website. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
391 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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