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Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment? v.18

Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment? v. 18
It is argued that some people choose to live in a house over an apartment, while others prefer to live in an apartment instead. This essay disagrees with the idea that a house brings more benefits because an apartment has a higher degree of security, and it saves us much more time from doing housework. To begin with, it is more secure to live in an apartment than a house since every building has multiple methods to protect its residents. Cameras installed in the common areas of all buildings makes it easier to track everyone’s ins and outs in case something bad happens. Following that, guests are restricted due to the requirement of a building card to enter. For example, some buildings in Canada provide passwords for each unit, and the guests are not able to open the entrance door until the building residents buzz them in with their passcodes. In addition, people do not need to spend much time cleaning if they live in an apartment. Instead of wasting 1 to 2 hours cleaning a 4-floor house, it only takes 30 minutes to tidy a 2 or 3-bedroom apartment. It is even better when some luxurious buildings provide house-keeping facilities to help people with cleaning work. One survey in Vietnam revealed that more and more young couples tended to buy apartments to avoid unnecessary time for cleaning so that they would have much more time for other leisure activities. In conclusion, a house is not more advantageous because an apartment can provide more security and save people more time from doing housework every weekend
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people
choose to
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live
in a
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house
over an
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apartment
, while others prefer to
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live
in an
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apartment
instead
. This essay disagrees with the
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idea
that a
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house
brings more benefits
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because
an
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apartment
has a higher degree of security, and it saves us much more
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time
from doing housework.

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begin
with, it is more secure to
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live
in an
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apartment
than a
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house
since every
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building
has multiple methods to protect its residents. Cameras installed in the common areas of all
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buildings
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makes
it easier to
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track
everyone’s ins and outs in case something
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bad
happens. Following that, guests
are restricted
due to the requirement of a
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building
card to enter.
For example
,
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some
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buildings
in Canada provide passwords for each unit, and the guests are not able to open the entrance door until the
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building
residents buzz them in with their passcodes.

In addition
,
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people
do not need to spend much
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time
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cleaning
if they
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live
in an
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apartment
.
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of wasting 1 to 2 hours
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cleaning
a 4-floor
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house
, it
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only
takes 30 minutes to tidy a 2 or 3-bedroom
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apartment
. It is even better when
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some
luxurious
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buildings
provide
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house
-keeping facilities to
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help
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people
with
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cleaning
work. One survey in Vietnam revealed that more and more young couples tended to
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buy
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apartments
to avoid unnecessary
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time
for
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cleaning
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so
that they would have much more
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time
for other leisure activities.

In conclusion
, a
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house
is not more advantageous
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because
an
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apartment
can provide more security and save
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people
more
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time
from doing housework every weekend
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
36Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment? v. 18

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
264 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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