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some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compered with living in an apartment. v.16

some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compered with living in an apartment. v. 16
Some people prefer to live in a building and a few others will feel that there are few advantages when compared to live in a flat rather than home. There are an equal number of advantages and disadvantages of living in a box compared to living in caves. Generally, houses are wide and have some spaces around it and have space to make gardens, it helps you to keep the plants of different species. In the summer it makes you less cool. It is good for producing a plethora of fruits and vegetables makes you easy to cook delicious items and not necessary to go market as well. In the house you will be having very less persons either one or two families. Namely, I am living in an independent mansion. It was so nice. It was a good place to live in. If it is our condo we can design our own colour to the wall. In the same way with residence, you should pay maintenance bill other than current bill and rent as well. A Balcony is small. You do not have enough right to make a garden. It is necessary to have an elevator if staying in accommodation and wait continues. Even though one advantage is you will get furnished shack and lots of room with huge ask of rent as well. But for buying it will cost almost 1 lakh rupees basing on the city. Namely, my cousin recently took the suite which is on the 14th floor of the building and if no electricity in that case you will get awful. And the rooms are very small compared to the condo as well. To Conclude, In my opinion, it is better to have dwelling when compared to penthouse, a home we can give, rent on it, but it will take lots of currency but less the cost of the suite.
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prefer to
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live
in a building and a few others will feel that there are few advantages when compared to
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live
in a flat
rather
than home. There are an equal number of advantages and disadvantages of living in a box compared to living in caves.

Generally
,
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houses
are wide and have
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some
spaces around it and have space to
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make
gardens, it
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helps
you to
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keep
the plants of
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different
species. In the summer it
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makes
you less cool. It is
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good
for producing a plethora of fruits and vegetables
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makes
you easy to cook delicious items and not necessary to go market
as well
. In the
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house
you will be having
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very
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less
persons either one or two families.
Namely
, I am living in an independent mansion. It was
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so
nice. It was a
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good
place to
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live
in.

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If
it is our condo we can design our
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own
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colour
to the wall.

In the same way
with residence, you should pay maintenance bill other than
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current
bill and rent
as well
. A Balcony is
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small
. You do not have
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enough
right to
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make
a garden. It is necessary to have an elevator if staying in accommodation and wait continues.
Even though
one advantage is you will
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get
furnished shack and lots of room with huge ask of rent
as well
.
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But
for buying it will cost almost 1 lakh rupees basing on the city.
Namely
, my cousin recently took the suite which is on the 14th floor of the building and if no electricity
in that case
you will
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get
awful. And the rooms are
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very
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small
compared to the condo
as well
.

To Conclude
, In my opinion, it is better to have dwelling when compared to penthouse, a home we can give, rent on it,
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but
it will take lots of currency
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but
less the cost of the suite.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compered with living in an apartment. v. 16

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
315 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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