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Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment? v.15

Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment? v. 15
Houses and apartments, every part of the world have two kinds of infrastructures. Do you think living in house feels better or on the advantage part as compared to the apartment, I have a few things to bring to everyone’s attention. Living in an apartment has community structure, where people can have a chat, sitting for a tea in a common place such as garden areas. In an emergency condition, we can have our neighbour immediately or seek help for elderly person such as getting groceries. Is that enough to justify? Certainly not. Let’s come to the main aspect, metropolitan cities don’t have enough space to accommodate millions of people and amenities required cannot be fulfilled, if they live far away. A community based infrastructure which consists of several buildings, schools, gym, swimming pool, entertainment, activities which can bring all under one roof. Over a decade, construction of apartments is surging, due to enormously increase population in metropolitan cities. As more demand, more increase in cost of living. On the other hand, apartments get usually reduced individual consumption as compared to houses, where everything works as centralized such as air conditioning, cooking gas, etc. , Apartments are the one of reason for environmental issues, tall buildings disrupt birds (hit / missing route) and safety concerns also need to be taken into consideration during emergency situations, such as fire accident. Apartments have their own advantage and disadvantages, which is solely based on the location. Houses have multiple advantages, firstly privacy. You can feel, you are in a comfortable zone. Secondly, it can let you be nature friendly, such as gardening. Welcoming guests is not a nightmare, no restrictions and feel independent. Plantations around the house have their contribution to reduce environmental effects. At the same time, it will keep you isolated and if you live as single or aged, you always need someone’s help, which could be impossible. Finally living in a house on advantage side, it helps to be less stressful and more relax. We would have our parking, greenery, outside pool. Wow, life would be really nice! ! !
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Houses
and
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apartments
, every part of the world have two kinds of infrastructures. Do you
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think
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living
in
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house
feels better or on the
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advantage
part as compared to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
apartment
, I have a few things to bring to everyone’s attention.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Living
in an
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
apartment
has community structure, where
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
can have a chat, sitting for a tea in a common place such as garden areas. In an emergency condition, we can have our
Possible spelling mistake. 'neighbour' is British English.
neighbour
immediately or seek
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help
for elderly person such as getting groceries. Is that
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enough
to justify?
Certainly
not.
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Let
’s
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come
to the main aspect, metropolitan cities don’t have
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enough
space to accommodate millions of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
and amenities required cannot
be fulfilled
, if they
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live
far away. A community based infrastructure which consists of several buildings, schools, gym, swimming pool, entertainment, activities which can bring all under one roof.

Over a decade, construction of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
apartments
is surging, due to
enormously
increase population in metropolitan cities. As more demand, more increase in cost of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
living
.
On the other hand
,
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apartments
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get
usually
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reduced
individual consumption as compared to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
houses
, where everything works as centralized such as air conditioning, cooking gas, etc.
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, Apartments
are the one of reason for environmental issues, tall buildings disrupt birds (hit / missing route) and safety concerns
also
need to
be taken
into consideration during emergency situations, such as fire accident.
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Apartments
have their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
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advantage
and disadvantages, which is
solely
based on the location.

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Houses
have multiple
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advantages
,
firstly
privacy. You can feel, you are in a comfortable zone.
Secondly
, it can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
you be nature friendly, such as gardening. Welcoming guests is not a nightmare, no restrictions and feel independent. Plantations around the
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house
have their contribution to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
environmental effects. At the same time, it will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
you isolated and if you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
as single or aged, you always need someone’s
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
, which could be impossible.

Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Finally
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living
in a
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house
on
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advantage
side, it
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helps
to be less stressful and more relax. We would have our parking, greenery, outside pool. Wow, life would be
really
nice! ! !
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment? v. 15

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
350 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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