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Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment? v.10

Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment? v. 10
The decision to choose, whether to reside in a house or in an apartment, is very difficult. Both of these choices have their benefits and this essay discusses them in a detail. Primarily, there are some beneficial characteristics, if someone chooses to live in a house. Firstly, this provides privacy to the owner and his family because while living in an apartment the family should live beside various other occupants and therefore their privacy is not maintained. Moreover, the person residing in the house could set up their own rules and regulations as per their liking. As opposed to living in apartment, the people in a house could enjoy their life without the interference from others around them. For instance, the house owner could set his own policies regarding activities such as partying, drying up clothes in an open. On the contrary, living in an apartment has its own benefits. Although people have to live with the others around them in an apartment, they also get more security due to this living arrangement. For example, people always get a helping hand in the time of emergency and do not have to go far for assistance. Likewise, most of the apartments have security arrangement which is not possible in a house unless its owner is very affluent. Majority of apartments, nowadays, provide securities such as guards and Cctvs, which is usually included in the price of the flats and for the ordinary houses, keeping these security options are very expensive. In conclusion, whether it is house or an apartment to live in, these both choices have their own benefits compared with others. In that, the houses provide privacy whereas apartments provide security.
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difficult. Both of these choices have their benefits and this essay discusses them in a detail.

Primarily
, there are
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some
beneficial characteristics, if someone chooses to
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live
in a
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house
.
Firstly
, this
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provides
privacy to the owner and his family
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because
while
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living
in an
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apartment
the family should
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live
beside various
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other
occupants and
therefore
their privacy is not maintained.
Moreover
, the person residing in the
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house
could set up their
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own
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rules
and regulations as per their liking. As opposed to
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living
in
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apartment
, the
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people
in a
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house
could enjoy their life without the interference from others around them.
For instance
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house
owner could set his
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own
policies regarding activities such as partying, drying up clothes in an open.

On the contrary
,
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living
in an
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apartment
has its
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benefits. Although
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people
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the others around them
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, they
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more
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due to this
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arrangement.
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,
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people
always
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a helping hand in the time of emergency and do not
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have to
go far for assistance.
Likewise
, most of the
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apartments
have
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security
arrangement which is not possible in a
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house
unless its owner is
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very
affluent. Majority of
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apartments
, nowadays,
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provide
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securities
such as guards and
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Cctvs
, which is
usually
included in the price of the flats and for the ordinary
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houses
, keeping these
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security
options are
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very
expensive.

In conclusion
, whether it is
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house
or an
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apartment
to
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live
in, these both choices have their
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own
benefits compared with others. In that, the
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houses
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provide
privacy whereas
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apartments
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provide
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security
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
36Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment? v. 10

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
281 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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