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Some people prefer shopping in shopping centres while others prefer local markets. What are the advantages of each? Which shopping experience do you prefer? v.3

Some people prefer shopping in shopping centres while others prefer local markets. What are the advantages of each? Which shopping experience do you prefer? v. 3
People have different preferences in term of shopping places and shopping experience. Many people choose to shop in malls or plazas while others like to buy goods from a traditional market. The following essay explains about benefits of both places and also expresses my preference. For a number of reasons, some people choose to purchase goods from a large marketplace. Firstly, shopping in a shopping mall is safer than that of local markets. Malls and plazas are equipped with the surveillance system and security guards ensure safety and security of customers. Secondly, shopping in a mega complex is more convenient and comfortable as most shopping malls are equipped with air conditioners that make the temperature soothing. Facilities like play zone for children, credit card payment, cineplex, food court etc. attracts many customers. However, few people still prefer local markets for the price. It is common that in a traditional market people get comparatively cheaper prices. Many unique or traditional products are not sold in modern places that are available in local markets. For examples, handmade crafts are only sold in local markets and each of the items is unique because it is a custom made product. In conclusion, it is undeniable that shopping in modern market places or in traditional markets has their own positive sides. I personally like to shop at a local market because I am a good bargainer and I could buy things at a better price. Shopping experience, price and variety of goods in a local market makes it more suitable for me to shop there more frequently.
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different
preferences in term of
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shopping
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places
and
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shopping
experience.
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Many
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people
choose to shop in
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malls
or plazas while others like to
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buy
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goods
from a
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traditional
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market
. The following essay
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explains
about benefits of both
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places
and
also
expresses my preference.

For a number of reasons,
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some
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people
choose to
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purchase
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goods
from a large marketplace.
Firstly
,
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shopping
in a
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shopping
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mall
is safer than that of
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local
markets.
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Malls
and plazas
are equipped
with the surveillance system and security guards ensure safety and security of customers.
Secondly
,
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shopping
in a mega complex is more convenient and comfortable as most
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shopping
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malls
are equipped
with air conditioners that
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make
the temperature soothing. Facilities like play zone for children, credit card payment,
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cineplex
, food court etc. attracts
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many
customers.

However
, few
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people
still
prefer
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local
markets for the
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price
. It is common that in a
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traditional
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market
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people
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get
comparatively
cheaper
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prices
.
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unique or
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traditional
products are not sold in modern
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places
that are available in
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local
markets. For examples, handmade crafts are
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only
sold in
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local
markets and each of the items is unique
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because
it is a
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custom made
product.

In conclusion
, it is undeniable that
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shopping
in modern
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market
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places
or in
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traditional
markets has their
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own
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positive
sides. I
personally
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local
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market
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because
I am a
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good
bargainer and I could
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buy
things at a better
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price
.
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Shopping
experience,
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price
and variety of
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goods
in a
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local
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market
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makes
it more suitable for me to shop there more
frequently
.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
44Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people prefer shopping in shopping centres while others prefer local markets. What are the advantages of each? Which shopping experience do you prefer? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
262 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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