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Some people link that children showed go to kindergarden before attending primary school, which others believe that is better for children to stay all day with their families. Discuss both v.1

Some people link that children showed go to kindergarden before attending primary school, which others believe that is better for children to stay all day with their families. 1
There is no doubt about the existence of a supreme being. Although some people believe that the only pathway to God is through Jesus, others disagree and argue that there are various paths to seeing God. In my essay, I will discuss both sides of the argument and explain my support for the latter view. On the one hand, some people think that Jesus Christ is the only route to meet with Jehovah. This is as a result of landmark happenings in the New Testament. For instance, John prophesied that God is sending a messiah whose shoes he is unfit to lose, that the messiah will wash away our sins, raise the dead, and enable us to see Jehovah through him. On the other hand, I would argue that there are other ways to see God. This is because several events in the Old Testament show clearly encounters between various men and Yahweh. To illustrate, Daniel, while in the lions' den prayed to God Almighty and he was delivered from the den. Furthermore, Mosses contacted God while leading the children of the Israelites out of Egypt. As a consequence, God instructed him to strike the rod on the Red Sea and the sea divided so they can pass through. In contrast, since they have seen God, then Jesus Christ is not the only passage to God. In conclusion, despite some people thinking that the only way to meet with Jehovah is through Jesus Christ as revealed in the New Testament through the prophesy of John, I believe that there are different ways in which God can be seen as manifested in the Old Testament with Daniel and Mosses.
There is no doubt about the existence of a supreme being. Although
some
people
believe that the
only
pathway to God is
through
Jesus, others disagree and argue that there are various paths to seeing God. In my essay, I will discuss both sides of the argument and
explain
my support for the latter view.

On the one hand,
some
people
think
that Jesus Christ is the
only
route to
meet
with Jehovah. This is
as a result
of landmark happenings in the New
Testament
.
For instance
, John prophesied that God is sending a messiah whose shoes he is unfit to lose, that the messiah will wash away our sins, raise the dead, and enable us to
see
Jehovah
through
him.

On the other hand
, I would argue that there are other ways to
see
God. This is
because
several
events
in the
Old
Testament
show
clearly
encounters between various
men
and Yahweh. To illustrate, Daniel, while in the lions' den prayed to God
Almighty and
he
was delivered
from the den.
Furthermore
, Mosses contacted God while leading the children of the Israelites out of Egypt. As a consequence, God instructed him to strike the rod on the Red Sea and the sea divided
so
they can pass
through
.
In contrast
, since they have
seen
God, then Jesus Christ is not the
only
passage to God.

In conclusion
, despite
some
people
thinking that the
only
way to
meet
with Jehovah is
through
Jesus Christ as revealed in the New
Testament
through
the prophesy
of John, I believe that there are
different
ways in which God can be
seen
as manifested in the
Old
Testament
with Daniel and Mosses.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people link that children showed go to kindergarden before attending primary school, which others believe that is better for children to stay all day with their families. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
278 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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