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the best way to reduce crime among people is to teach parents a good parenting skills. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement? give your own opinion and examples. v.1

the best way to reduce crime among people is to teach parents a good parenting skills. with this statement? give your own opinion and examples. v. 1
Migration for work is a popular trend. While some people argue that it has a bad impact on children, others, however, think that it is a positive development. I believe that people migrate for better future prospects and it is beneficial for their children. On the one hand, people migrate to foreign nations because they want to provide a better life for their family and children. Most of these people migrate from underdeveloped countries to developed nations. This is because most of these developed countries provide free education and medical services to families. To illustrate further, Canada provides free medical care and education to its people. Furthermore, once youngsters complete their education they have much better job opportunities than they could have in their home country. As a result, youngsters feel more secure and satisfied. On the other hand, others believe that migrating to a new country has a negative impact on children. To start with, they may find it harder to adjust to a new culture. Youngsters need time and friends to adjust to a new society and when they do not find friends, they feel isolated and many of them become the victim of depression. Moreover, a foreign language is another hurdle that they face. Many families who migrate from Asian countries to Europe are not fluent in a local language like English. Due to this, children feel insecure when they try to mingle with locals. For instance, according to a survey by Hindustan Times, 40 percent of Indian Punjabi youth finds themselves isolated In Ontario, Canada because they do not have good command over the English language. To conclude, although initially, youngsters find it difficult to adjust to a new culture once they learn the local language and start mingling with locals as they find themselves in a much more secure position due to various facilities like better education and free medical services along with better job opportunities in the future.
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positive
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people
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migrate
for
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better
future prospects and it is beneficial for their children.

On the one hand,
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people
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migrate
to foreign nations
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because
they want to provide a
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better
life for their family and
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children
. Most of these
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people
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migrate
from underdeveloped
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countries
to developed nations. This is
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because
most of these developed
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countries
provide free
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education
and medical services to families. To illustrate
further
, Canada provides free medical care and
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education
to its
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people
.
Furthermore
, once youngsters complete their
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education
they have much
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better
job opportunities than they could have in their home
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country
.
As a result
, youngsters feel more secure and satisfied.

On the other hand
, others believe that migrating to a
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new
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country
has a
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negative
impact on
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children
. To
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with, they may
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find
it harder to adjust to a
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new
culture. Youngsters need time and friends to adjust to a
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new
society and when they do not
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find
friends, they feel isolated and
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many
of them become the victim of depression.
Moreover
, a foreign language is another hurdle that they face.
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Many
families who
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migrate
from Asian
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countries
to Europe are not fluent in a
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local
language like English. Due to this,
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children
feel insecure when they try to mingle with
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locals
.
For instance
, according to a survey by Hindustan Times, 40 percent of Indian Punjabi youth
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finds
themselves isolated In Ontario, Canada
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because
they do not have
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good
command over the English language.

To conclude
, although
initially
, youngsters
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it difficult to adjust to a
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new
culture once they learn the
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local
language and
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start
mingling with
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locals
as they
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find
themselves in a much more secure position due to various facilities like
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better
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education
and free medical services along with
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better
job opportunities in the future.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay the best way to reduce crime among people is to teach parents a good parenting skills. with this statement? give your own opinion and examples. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
324 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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