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Some people like to travel with a companion. Other people prefer to travel alone. What do you prefer? v.5

Some people like to travel with a companion. Other people prefer to travel alone. What do you prefer? v. 5
Nowadays travelling is becoming more and more popular. Solitary travel is preferable for some people, others could not imagine their journey without a partner or a friend. As for me, I like travelling with my friends because it is cost-effective due to the fact that all expenses are shared between us. Moreover, you always have someone, with whom you might discuss anything you want, thus it is very convenient for a person who is afraid to be alone, to meet new people or who may not speak a foreign language well. For example, I have difficulties in communication with someone I did not know before, that is why I always take along a friend of mine. In addition, if it is an extreme situation, something terrible has happened, you might trust friends who help you and solve your problem. Besides, I could help mentioning that travelling with a companion generally is gay and memorable, and these memories of the journey might warm your soul during your life. On the other hand, travelling solo has some advantages. Firstly, you do not have to conform to friends needs, which gives you a possibility to have much more spare time and a free timetable. What is more, one will be less nervous and stressed due to associated problems, thus, it is opportune for a person who want to have a rest from friends and to keep his mind free. For instance, my friend Alex is such a person who uses a journey as a possibility to be alone. Therefore, travelling alone gives you more chances to meet new people and maybe to find your love than if you travel with someone, and, of course, it is a perfect chance to travel in order to improve a foreign language. In conclusion, I would like to say that a choice whether to travel alone or not depends on your final goals: to have a rest from friends and to keep your mind free or to save money and have a perfect journey
Nowadays
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travelling
is becoming more and more popular. Solitary
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travel
is preferable for
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some
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people
, others could not imagine their
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journey
without a partner or a friend.

As for me, I like
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travelling
with my
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friends
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because
it
is cost
-effective due to the fact that all expenses
are shared
between us.
Moreover
, you always have someone, with whom you might discuss anything you want,
thus
it is
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very
convenient for a person
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who
is afraid to be
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alone
, to
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meet
new
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people
or
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who
may not speak a foreign language well.
For example
, I have difficulties in communication with someone I did not know
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before
,
that is
why I always take along a
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friend
of mine.
In addition
, if it is an extreme situation, something terrible has happened, you might trust
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friends
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who
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help
you and solve your problem.
Besides
, I could
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help
The verb 'help' is used with an infinitive: "to mention" or "mention".
mentioning
that
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travelling
with a companion
generally
is gay and memorable, and these memories of the
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journey
might warm your soul during your life.

On the other hand
,
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travelling
solo has
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some
advantages.
Firstly
, you do not
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have to
conform to
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friends
needs, which gives you a possibility to have much more spare time and a free timetable.
What is more
, one will be less nervous and
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stressed
due to associated problems,
thus
, it is opportune for a person
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who
want to have a rest from
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friends
and to
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keep
his mind free.
For instance
, my
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friend
Alex is such a person
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who
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uses
a
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journey
as a possibility to be
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alone
.
Therefore
,
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travelling
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alone
gives you more chances to
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meet
new
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people
and maybe to find your
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love
than if you
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travel
with someone, and,
of course
, it is a perfect chance to
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travel
in order to
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improve
a foreign language.

In conclusion
, I would like to say that a choice whether to
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travel
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alone
or not depends on your final goals: to have a rest from
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friends
and to
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keep
your mind free or to save money and have a perfect
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journey
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
If you talk to a man in a language he understands, that goes to his head. If you talk to him in his own language, that goes to his heart.
Nelson Mandela

IELTS essay Some people like to travel with a companion. Other people prefer to travel alone. What do you prefer? v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
336 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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