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Some people like to spend free time with the friends of the same age. Others like to spend free time with people of different ages. Discuss both views and state your opinion. v.1

Some people like to spend free time with the friends of the same age. Others like to spend free time with people of different ages. v. 1
Life of people is filled with sorrows, sufferings, joy, thrill, adventure and so on. In order to reduce stress and relax people often socialise by going to night clubs, mingle with friends or enjoy a beachside walk with their partners. This helps them to feel refreshed and brace them to face everyday life challenges. For few people, spending leisure time with friends of different age group is soothing while others find it comfortable in spending free time with friends of similar age. This essay will analyse both views before presenting an opinion. People find it comfortable and soothing to enjoy their spare time with friends that grew with them or are of same age. They believe that they have similar interests and this way they can better exchange their thoughts. They feel more comfortable in expressing their opinion on a wide variety of topics including health, education, sports and so on whichever they share in common. Moreover, they don't have to be conscious about their etiquette's. Their physical and intellectual level are more or less same which gives them the opportunity to play similar games, share their clothing and other stuff. For instance, hiking, friends of similar age will enjoy more because they will be climbing at the same pace, thrill and passion, and they don't have to wait for people that are slow due to their growing age and so on. Furthermore, sometimes there are some cultural barriers which do not permit people to make friendship with people of different ages especially in Asian subcontinent where parents assume that their child might fall into bad hands if allowed to spend time with elder children. On the contrary, people like to enjoy the leisure time with friends of different age group. They say that common interests and similar mindset are more important than similarity in age. They like and enjoy their relationship because they want to learn different things from their experiences and that might be valuable for them in future. For instance, in west, friends in spite of the age differences speak at length on different topics and share their opinion which helps them to enjoy their friendship. Moreover, they say that friendship is due to inspiration from each other and has no age limits. To recapitulate, the aforementioned provides plausible arguments over both views. However, I personally believe that friendship has no relation with age and it is largely dependent on the common interests and mindset of each other.
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on. In order to
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reduce
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stress
and relax
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people
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often
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socialise
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or
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a
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walk with their partners. This
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helps
them to feel refreshed and brace them to face everyday life challenges. For few
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people
, spending leisure
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time
with
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friends
of
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different
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age
group is soothing while others find it comfortable in spending free
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time
with
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friends
of
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similar
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age
. This essay will
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analyse
both views
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before
presenting an opinion.

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find it comfortable and soothing to
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their spare
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with
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friends
that grew with them or are of same
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age
. They believe that they have
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similar
interests and this way they can better exchange their thoughts. They feel more comfortable in expressing their opinion on a wide variety of topics including health, education, sports and
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so
on whichever they share in common.
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, they don't
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be conscious about their etiquette's. Their physical and intellectual level are more or less same which gives them the opportunity to play
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similar
games, share their clothing and
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other
stuff.
For instance
, hiking,
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friends
of
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similar
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age
will
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enjoy
more
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because
they will be climbing at the same pace, thrill and passion, and they don't
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have to
wait for
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people
that are slow due to their growing
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age
and
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on.
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there are
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cultural barriers which do not permit
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to
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make
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friendship
with
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of
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especially
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bad
hands if
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allowed
to spend
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time
with elder children.

On the contrary
,
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like to
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the leisure
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with
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of
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age
group. They say that common interests and
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similar
mindset are more
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important
than similarity in
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age
. They like and
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their relationship
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because
they want to learn
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things from their experiences and that might be valuable for them
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in future
.
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, in west,
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friends
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in spite of
the
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differences speak at length on
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different
topics and share their opinion which
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helps
them to
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enjoy
their
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.
Moreover
, they say that
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friendship
is due to inspiration from each
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other
and has no
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age
limits.

To recapitulate, the aforementioned provides plausible arguments over both views.
However
, I
personally
believe that
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friendship
has no relation with
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age
and it is
largely
dependent on the common interests and mindset of each
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other
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
53Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
One language sets you in a corridor for life. Two languages open every door along the way.
Frank Smith

IELTS essay Some people like to spend free time with the friends of the same age. Others like to spend free time with people of different ages. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
411 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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