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Some people give money as gifts to friends. Others try to give a specific kind of present. Which kind of gift do you prefer giving to a friend? v.1

Some people give money as gifts to friends. Others try to give a specific kind of present. Which kind of gift do you prefer giving to a friend? v. 1
Environmental issues like climate alteration and contamination have been increasing at an alarming rate. The governing bodies started remedial measures, but aren't commendable. Extensive damage that has already been done is one of the reasons for the former out coming. Overcoming the situation can only be possible by solutions like raising awareness. Following essay will put forth the reasons and in furtherance suggests solutions to tackle given situation. Firstly, let us comprehend the causes of why the governments' pursuits around the globe regarding this issue weren't optimum. The major reason is the fact that it is only possible when all of us collaborate to enhance the echo system. Even though the government seeks redemption it is impossible unless every individual is indulging in the task. Most of the population is unable to foresee the forthcoming devastating events which are the result of malicious human endeavours. Because of these reasons, despite trying hard the authorities were unable to succeed. Now we will hurtle towards the remedies to successfully improvise the ecological conditions around us. Awareness campaigns should be conducted at a humongous scale and people are to be educated regarding the aftermath events of environmental disruption. Hence, a large degree of the public will take part in accomplishing redemption. Irrefutable statutes regarding anti-environmental activities like deforestation and natural resource contamination should be enforced. This can mostly hinder ecological damage. By following these methods we can curb climate changes and pollution. Lack of awareness and rules which aren't strict enough were reasons for environmental mishaps. Hence, it is eventually concluded that by conducting campaigns and enforcing serious admonitions can save ecology from extinction.
Environmental issues like climate alteration and contamination have been increasing at an alarming rate. The governing bodies
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started
remedial measures,
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but
aren't commendable. Extensive damage that has already
been done
is one of the
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reasons
for the former out coming. Overcoming the situation can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
be possible by solutions like raising awareness. Following essay will put forth the
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reasons
and in furtherance suggests solutions to tackle
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given
situation.

Firstly
,
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let
us comprehend the causes of why the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
' pursuits around the globe regarding this issue weren't optimum. The major
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
reason
is the fact that it is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
possible when all of us collaborate to enhance the echo system.
Even though
the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
seeks redemption it is impossible unless every individual is indulging in the task. Most of the population is unable to foresee the forthcoming devastating
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
events
which are the result of malicious human
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endeavours
.
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Because
of these
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reasons
, despite trying
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hard
the authorities were unable to succeed.

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Now
we will hurtle towards the remedies to
successfully
improvise the ecological conditions around us. Awareness campaigns should
be conducted
at a humongous scale and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
are to
be educated
regarding the aftermath
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
events
of environmental disruption.
Hence
, a large degree of the public will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
take part
in accomplishing redemption. Irrefutable statutes regarding anti-environmental activities like deforestation and natural resource contamination should
be enforced
. This can
mostly
hinder ecological damage. By following these methods we can curb climate
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
and pollution.

Lack of awareness and
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rules
which aren't strict
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enough
were
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reasons
for environmental mishaps.
Hence
, it is
eventually
concluded that by conducting campaigns and enforcing serious admonitions can save ecology from extinction.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people give money as gifts to friends. Others try to give a specific kind of present. Which kind of gift do you prefer giving to a friend? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
271 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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