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Some people feel that the design of newly constructed buildings in big cities should be controlled by governments. Others contest those who finance the construction of a building should be free to design it as they see fit. What is your position? Discuss v.8

Some people feel that the design of newly constructed buildings in big cities should be controlled by governments. Others contest those who finance the construction of a building should be free to design it as they see fit. What is your position? Discuss v. 8
In today’s world, construction industry has grown beyond wildest expectations. In most of the gigantic cities mammoth buildings have become a special feature which attracts thousands of people. However, whether the modern designs of buildings should be approved by government before construction begin or not is a controvertial one which is debated by many people. This will be criticized before a well reasoned conclusion is reached. On the one hand, people who invest millions of dollars in a building expect to have a unique design which can provide needed outcome of the project. For instance, the Berj Dubai building design is one that has not been controlled by any government. This has allow the engineers to built the biggest and beautiful building of the world. This has allow them to earn millions dollars in revenue in a short period of time. These benefits won’t be possible, if the government implement any control in building design. On the other hand, uncontrolled designers and engineers of buildings mostly consider the revenue rather than other crucial measures such as safety. To illustrate, a research conducted in Canada, buildings which are built without any government intervention are not capable of standing earthquake. In addition, most of them lack of most needed safety features such as emergency exit routes and fire control system. When looking at this example, it is clear that why some people believe that government intervention is necessary in building designs. To conclude, in my opinion, government control is crucial to make sure the building is fit to stand without causing problem to users of the building. It is predicted that more government intervention will take place to lift the standards of buildings in the foreseeable future.
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today
’s world, construction industry has grown beyond wildest expectations. In most of the gigantic cities mammoth
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buildings
have become a special feature which attracts thousands of
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people
.
However
, whether the modern designs of
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buildings
should
be approved
by
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government
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before
construction
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begin
or not is a
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controvertial
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is debated
by
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many
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people
. This will
be criticized
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before
a well reasoned conclusion
is reached
.

On the one hand,
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people
who invest millions of dollars in a
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building
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expect
to have a unique design which can provide needed outcome of the project.
For instance
, the
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Berj
Dubai
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building
design is one that has not
been controlled
by any
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government
. This has
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allow
the engineers
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to built
the biggest and
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beautiful
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building
of the world. This has
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allow
them to earn millions dollars in revenue in a short period of time. These benefits won’t be possible, if the
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government
implement any control in
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building
design.

On the other hand
, uncontrolled designers and engineers of
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buildings
mostly
consider the revenue
rather
than other crucial measures such as safety. To illustrate,
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a research
conducted in Canada,
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buildings
which
are built
without any
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government
intervention are not capable of standing earthquake.
In addition
, most of them lack of most needed safety features such as emergency exit routes and fire control system. When looking at this example, it is
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clear
that why
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some
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people
believe that
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government
intervention is necessary in
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building
designs.

To conclude
, in my opinion,
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government
control is crucial to
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make
sure the
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building
is fit
to stand without causing problem to users of the
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building
. It
is predicted
that more
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government
intervention will take place to lift the standards of
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buildings
in the foreseeable future.
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23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people feel that the design of newly constructed buildings in big cities should be controlled by governments. Others contest those who finance the construction of a building should be free to design it as they see fit. What is your position? Discuss v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
285 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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