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Some people feel that the design of newly constructed buildings in big cities should be controlled by governments. Others believe those who finance the construction of a building should be free to design it as they see fit. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. v.5

Some people feel that the design of newly constructed buildings in big cities should be controlled by governments. Others believe those who finance the construction of a building should be free to design it as they see fit. v. 5
While a few people believe that the government must control the design of new buildings, many think that no restrictions should be imposed on the architecture of buildings that are fully funded by its owners. I agree with the latter thought as it is the prerogative of rightful individuals to construct buildings as it suits them. Admittedly, there are some minor benefits when the government enforces certain conditions for the common good of the society. For instance, some governments force the builders to have a parking space in the ground floor to avoid parking the cars on the road side. This is beneficial for the society as there will be more space on the road and it in turn potentially reduces the traffic congestion due to parking cars on the road. Moreover, some governments enact rules to preserve the aesthetic feeling of the city. For example, in Paris new tall buildings are not allowed to maintain the traditional look of the city. Nevertheless, the state should not interfere with the rights of building owners. As private property owners, people are entitled to erect buildings, according to their own taste as long as it is not causing any inconvenience to the general public. Furthermore, the authority should not restrict the artistic freedom of the architects and the home owners. To illustrate, if Saudi government had imposed resting on building Burj Khalifa based on its planned height, we would not have got the world's tallest building which is an engineering marvel. To conclude, owners of the building must be granted every right to design the building of their choice as long as the basic government rules are followed. Snatching the right of artistic freedom would be detrimental for the development of all forms of art, including architecture.
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believe that the
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government
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must
control the design of new
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buildings
,
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many
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think
that no restrictions should
be imposed
on the architecture of
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buildings
that are
fully
funded by its
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owners
. I
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agree
with the latter
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thought
as it is the prerogative of rightful individuals to construct
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buildings
as it suits them.

Admittedly
, there are
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some
minor benefits when the
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government
enforces certain conditions for the common
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good
of the society.
For instance
,
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some
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governments
force the builders to have a parking space in the
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ground floor
to avoid parking the cars on the road side. This is beneficial for the society as there will be more space on the road and it in turn
potentially
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reduces
the traffic congestion due to parking cars on the road.
Moreover
,
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some
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governments
enact
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rules
to preserve the aesthetic feeling of the city.
For example
, in Paris new tall
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buildings
are not
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allowed
to maintain the traditional look of the city.

Nevertheless
, the state should not interfere with the rights of
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building
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owners
. As private property
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owners
,
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people
are entitled
to erect
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buildings
, according to their
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own
taste as long as it is not causing any inconvenience to the
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general public
.
Furthermore
, the authority should not restrict the artistic freedom of the architects and the home
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owners
. To illustrate, if Saudi
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government
had imposed resting on
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building
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Burj
Khalifa based on its planned height, we would not have
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got
the world's tallest
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building
which is an engineering marvel.

To conclude
,
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owners
of the
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building
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must
be granted
every right to design the
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building
of their choice as long as the basic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
are followed
. Snatching the right of artistic freedom would be detrimental for the development of all forms of art, including architecture.
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IELTS essay Some people feel that the design of newly constructed buildings in big cities should be controlled by governments. Others believe those who finance the construction of a building should be free to design it as they see fit. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
295 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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