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Home schooling belongs to the past and is unacceptable in the modern society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.2

Home schooling belongs to the past and is unacceptable in the modern society. with this statement? v. 2
Everything has two sides and home schooling is not an exception. Nowadays, there has many people criticize about that way of education by different thoughts. We have to acknowledge that home schooling is one of the most natural way of educating. Because no one can know children as much as their parents do. That gives parents a good chance to consider and choose the best method and concept that they teach their children at home. Moreover, learning is more enjoyable and effective for children. If it happens at home, children can interact directly with their teachers-parents and home schooling is less pressure education type. On the contrary, many people believe that home schooling is unacceptable in modern society. Professionals have specific approach to children with different ages, levels and characters. For instance, they can organize Quiz game that help students to be more interesting in learning. That approach produces good and effective results and without those techniques parents, who teach their children at home, have no chance. Next, home schooling is unrealistic because not every parent is capable of teaching their children at home. The first reason is, they do not have enough time to spend on teaching because of economic pressure in modern life. Second, not all parents have wide scope of knowledge, they can not their children something which they do not know themselves. The blind can not lead the blind. For example, not all of us have profound knowledge of science, history or geography even on a school textbook level. Eventually, even those moms and dads who had outstanding academic performances at school, could forget the materials they studied as time went by. In conclusion, I favor teaching should be done by professionals, who have abilities and experiences instead of home schooling that is done by parents.
Everything has two sides and home
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
schooling
is not an exception. Nowadays, there has
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
criticize about that way of education by
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
thoughts.

We
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have to
acknowledge that home
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
schooling
is one of the most natural way of educating.
“Because” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Because
no one can know
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
as much as their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
do. That gives
You should probably use "parent".
parents
a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
chance to consider and choose the best method and concept that they teach their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
at home.
Moreover
, learning is more enjoyable and effective for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
. If it happens at home,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
can interact
directly
with their teachers-parents and home
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
schooling
is less pressure education type.

On the contrary
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
believe that home
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
schooling
is unacceptable in modern society. Professionals have specific approach to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
with
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
ages, levels and characters.
For instance
, they can organize Quiz game that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
students to be more interesting in learning. That approach produces
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
and effective results and without those techniques
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
, who teach their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
at home, have no chance.

Next
, home
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schooling
is unrealistic
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
not every
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parent
is capable of teaching their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
at home. The
first
reason is, they do not have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
time to spend on teaching
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of economic pressure in modern life. Second, not all
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
have wide scope of knowledge, they can not their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
something which they do not know themselves. The blind can not lead the blind.
For example
, not all of us have profound knowledge of science, history or geography even on a school textbook level.
Eventually
, even those moms and dads who had outstanding academic performances at school, could forget the materials they studied as time went by.

In conclusion
, I favor teaching should
be done
by professionals, who have abilities and experiences
instead
of home
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
schooling
that
is done
by
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Home schooling belongs to the past and is unacceptable in the modern society. with this statement? v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
300 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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