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Some people feel that the design of newly constructed buildings in big cities should be controlled by governments. Others believe those who finance the construction of a building should be free to design it as they see fit. v.3

Some people feel that the design of newly constructed buildings in big cities should be controlled by governments. Others believe those who finance the construction of a building should be free to design it as they see fit. v. 3
The argument is about some people feel that the design of newly constructed buildings in big cities should be controlled by governments and others believe those who finance the construction of a building should be free to design it as they see fit. They both advantages and disadvantages. There are so many reasons in the following paragraphs. It needs to discuss more deeply. We should discuss the advantage first. The advantage of the newly constructed building in big cities be controlled by governments, is it will fit in the whole city. If it has a reasonable design. Some people from another area will feel amazing and it makes the city have a symbolic style. If it has an excellent town and country planner, he can design it more fit in other buildings. Some buildings from several hundred years ago are designed by the government, such as a famous painter or architect to design the church. The advantage of who finances the construction of a building should be free to design it as they see fit. It may be appearing a better building than other buildings. Most of the famous building nowadays is a design by an individual. Secondly, the disadvantage of the buildings controlled by governments, is it may make the whole city more boring and not any feeling of freshness. The disadvantage of those who finance the construction of a building has the right free to design it also may make have not any special. Even provoked antipathy. To sum up, we still discuss it again.
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governments
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and others
believe those who finance the construction of a
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building
should be free to
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design
it as they
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see
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fit
. They both
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advantages
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many
reasons in the following paragraphs. It needs to discuss more
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.

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advantage
first
. The
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advantage
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constructed
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building
in
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big
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cities
be controlled
by
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governments
, is it will
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fit
in the whole city.
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If
it has a reasonable
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design
.
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Some
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people
from another area will feel amazing and it
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makes
the city have a symbolic style. If it has an excellent town and country planner, he can
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design
it more
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fit
in other
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buildings
.
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Some
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buildings
from several hundred years ago
are designed
by the
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government
, such as a
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famous
painter or architect to
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design
the church. The
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advantage
of who finances the construction of a
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building
should be free to
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design
it as they
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see
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fit
. It may
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be appearing
a better
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building
than other
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buildings
. Most of the
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famous
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building
nowadays is a
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design
by an individual.

Secondly
, the disadvantage of the
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buildings
controlled by
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governments
, is it may
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make
the whole city more boring and not any feeling of freshness. The disadvantage of those who finance the construction of a
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building
has the right free to
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design
it
also
may
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make
have not any special. Even provoked antipathy.

To sum up, we
still
discuss it again.
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33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people feel that the design of newly constructed buildings in big cities should be controlled by governments. Others believe those who finance the construction of a building should be free to design it as they see fit. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
257 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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