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Some people feel that the design of newly constructed buildings in big cities should be controlled by governments. Others believe those who finance the construction of a building should be free to design it as they see fit. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. v.6

Some people feel that the design of newly constructed buildings in big cities should be controlled by governments. Others believe those who finance the construction of a building should be free to design it as they see fit. v. 6
Architecture is a free style of art that shouldn't be restricted by any means. While it's believed by some people that the way how recently designed buildings are constructed in large towns must be legislated by governments, others feel it's a choice that only the sponsors of such a project should make according to the way, which suits them the best. The Essay will discuss why Some people feel that the design of newly constructed buildings in big cities should be controlled by governments, but why Others believe those who finance the construction of a building should be free to design it as they see fit. In fact, any construction in a country should be formulated by governmental institutions. Moreover, they think it's something that should be unified across the country. For instance, the housing estate puts the rules in Japan that determine the space available for any newly planned tower. Consequently, limiting the creativity of business owners in order to preposterously stick to certain protocols will only be a burden. On the contrary, not every rule fits to the needs of those who finance such creation. Furthermore, this limitation might not only be insignificant, but also could negatively affect the success of these trials. For example, a fashion shop will need more rooms with long corridors for people to walk on while watching a new collection of clothes. Therefore, it's sometimes acceptable to allow designers not to commit to a specific frame when deciding to create a new architectural design. In conclusion, following an official protocol of constructing architectural units is a controversial topic. The Essay argued why these units should take a special form assigned by the official estates of a country, but why other opinions disagree. In my opinion, art should never be restricted. Instead, it should be left to the imagination of the artist.
Architecture is a free style of art that shouldn't
be restricted
by any means. While
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it's
believed by
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some
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people
that the way how recently designed buildings
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in large towns
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must
be legislated
by
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governments
, others feel
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it's
a choice that
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only
the sponsors of such a project should
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make
according to the way, which suits them the best. The Essay will discuss why
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Some
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people
feel that the design of
newly
constructed buildings in
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big
cities should
be controlled
by
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governments
,
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but
why Others believe those who finance the construction of a building should be free to design it as they
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see
fit.

In fact, any construction in a country should
be formulated
by governmental institutions.
Moreover
, they
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think
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it's
something that should
be unified
across the country.
For instance
, the housing estate puts the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
in Japan that determine the space available for any
newly
planned tower.
Consequently
, limiting the creativity of business owners in order to
preposterously
stick to certain protocols will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
be a burden.

On the contrary
, not every
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rule
fits to the needs of those who finance such creation.
Furthermore
, this limitation might not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
be insignificant,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
could
negatively
affect the success of these trials.
For example
, a fashion shop will need more rooms with long corridors for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to walk on while watching a new collection of clothes.
Therefore
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
it's
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sometimes
acceptable to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allow
designers not to commit to a specific frame when deciding to create a new architectural design.

In conclusion
, following an official protocol of constructing architectural units is a controversial topic. The Essay argued why these units should take a special form assigned by the official estates of a country,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
why other opinions disagree. In my opinion, art should never
be restricted
.
Instead
, it should be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
to the imagination of the artist.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people feel that the design of newly constructed buildings in big cities should be controlled by governments. Others believe those who finance the construction of a building should be free to design it as they see fit. v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
308 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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