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People living in the twenty first century generally have a better quality of life than people who lived in previous centuries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.1

People living in the twenty first century generally have a better quality of life than people who lived in previous centuries. with this statement? v. 1
We often hear the expression ‘there’s no better time to be alive than now’, usually referring to the improved standard of living of modern-day humans, whose lives have been greatly enhanced by the not-so-distant in the past technological progress. Advanced medical care, a wider range of high-profile and lucrative jobs, international trade and travel and cutting edge entertainment facilities are just a few aspects of today’s life that have contributed to the widespread belief and feeling that life now is far better than it was for our ancestors. I share this belief to a certain extent as far as comfort and choice are concerned, but have some doubts as to whether this is the case with interpersonal relationships and mental health. To begin with, it is certainly true that the discovery of many new medications has improved the quality of life of many people with chronic diseases, has made it possible to venture out to faraway destinations without the worry of being killed by a deadly virus and has generally extended the average life span of humans. With the help of technology and the latest scientific breakthroughs, some ill people and older citizens are now able to spend longer time with their families, being independent and not a burden for their relatives. Furthermore, improvements in the comfort of our own homes, transportation systems and the simple activities of our daily lives has reduced the amount of effort, manual work and stress that were inevitable in the past. Take as an example the simple daily laundry washing which is no longer done in the river by hand but requires no more than the push of a button. On the other hand, there are some aspects of modern life that have become way more challenging than they were for earlier generations. It seems that human relationships have become harder to build and maintain with social media and technology often being blamed for this. Many people report lack of self-confidence, are afraid of criticism and what image they project into the world. With the human being a social animal, it is essential that we stay in groups, build communities and receive support from our peers. However, alienation which stems from the prevalence of technology has proven counterproductive in this direction and has affected people’s lives negatively, overall worsening their quality of life. In conclusion, there are aspects of twenty-first-century existence that are better and worse. It is wonderful that people can enjoy a longer, healthier and more comfortable life, however, happiness is only real when shared. In my view, a lacking sense of community in today’s cities can seriously undermine one’s personal satisfaction with the conditions under which they are living.
We
often
hear the expression ‘there’s no better time to be alive than
now
’,
usually
referring to the
improved
standard of living of modern-day
humans
, whose
lives
have been
greatly
enhanced by the not-
so
-distant in the past technological progress. Advanced medical care, a wider range of high-profile and lucrative jobs, international trade and travel and cutting edge entertainment facilities are
just
a few aspects of
today
’s
life
that have contributed to the widespread belief and feeling that
life
now
is far better than it was for our ancestors. I share this belief to a certain extent as far as comfort and choice
are concerned
,
but
have
some
doubts
as to whether
this is the case with interpersonal relationships and mental health.

To
begin
with, it is
certainly
true that the discovery of
many
new medications has
improved
the quality of
life
of
many
people
with chronic diseases, has made it possible to venture out to faraway destinations without the worry of
being killed
by a deadly virus and has
generally
extended the average
life
span of
humans
. With the
help
of technology and the latest scientific breakthroughs,
some
ill
people
and older citizens are
now
able to spend longer time with their families, being independent and not a burden for their relatives.
Furthermore
, improvements in the comfort of our
own
homes, transportation systems and the simple activities of our daily
lives
has
reduced
the amount of effort, manual work and
stress
that were inevitable in the past. Take as an example the simple daily laundry washing which is no longer done in the river by hand
but
requires no more than the push of a button.

On the other hand
, there are
some
aspects of modern
life
that have become way more challenging than they were for earlier generations. It seems that
human
relationships have become harder to build and maintain with social media and technology
often
being blamed
for this.
Many
people
report lack of self-confidence, are afraid of criticism and what image they project into the world. With the
human
being a social animal, it is essential that we stay in groups, build communities and receive support from our peers.
However
, alienation which stems from the prevalence of technology has proven counterproductive in this direction and has
affected
people’s
lives
negatively
,
overall
worsening their quality of life.

In conclusion
, there are aspects of twenty-
first
-century existence that are better and worse. It is wonderful that
people
can enjoy a longer, healthier and more comfortable
life
,
however
, happiness is
only
real when shared. In my view, a lacking sense of community in
today
’s cities can
seriously
undermine one’s personal satisfaction with the conditions under which they are living.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay People living in the twenty first century generally have a better quality of life than people who lived in previous centuries. with this statement? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
448 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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