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Some people feel that paparazzi should not follow celebrities and invade their privacy by taking pictures of them everywhere, while others believe this is just the price of fame. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.2

Some people feel that paparazzi should not follow celebrities and invade their privacy by taking pictures of them everywhere, while others believe this is just the price of fame. v. 2
Taking photograph of famous people is a popular job in everywhere. People want to know more about how their icon life and this is why regular activities is followed by paparazzi. Some pupils think celebrities's life pays back them personal's life. The reason is papparazzi is a work and people have to do their job. Like other jobs, we have to do to earn our salary. How ever people should respect other life and they spect back what you are doing. For example, Dam Vinh Hung had publiced his mother's news to the reporter by volunteer and pleasure to answer any questions. Mean while some else is doing for reputation. Some of them doing every even giving a rumor which is create by themself. In Vietnam, one of the most famous singer, who is the first pioner for electric music, has growth up like today have drop off his career. Because of pressure from audience came from unknow picture about bulleting his girlfriend. In the real world a lot of ways to take a picture about celebrity's life such as asking them, set apointment and i think they will happy if you guys do that. Actually it also improve relationship each other. However it is a change for more informations in the news and get closer to the promotion opportunity. Everyone should have their own time not everything we see is what it means like that. In some case, the solution they do is reasonable but not suitable or not right with others. In constrat one day everyone knows what you have done is unrealistic and the consequence is social will turn back with you but no one else can help you out of your problem. In conclusion, any kind of work has their own disadvantaged and from my opion of view I think paparazzi should follow and take photograph but in a polite way. Finally, the demand from general public that causes the development of country's economy.
Taking photograph of
famous
people
is a popular job in everywhere.
People
want to know more about how their icon
life
and this is why regular activities
is followed
by paparazzi.
Some
pupils
think
celebrities's
life
pays back them personal's life.

The reason is
papparazzi
is a work and
people
have to
do their job. Like
other
jobs, we
have to
do to earn our salary.
How ever
people
should respect
other
life and
they
spect
back what you are doing.
For example
, Dam
Vinh
Hung had
publiced
his mother's news to the reporter by volunteer and pleasure to answer any questions.
Mean while
some
else is doing for reputation.
Some
of them doing every even giving a rumor which is
create
by
themself
. In Vietnam, one of the most
famous
singer
, who is the
first
pioner
for electric music, has growth up like
today
have drop off his career.
Because
of pressure from audience came from
unknow
picture about
bulleting
his girlfriend.

In the real world
a lot of
ways to take a picture about celebrity's
life
such as asking them, set
apointment
and
i
think
they
will happy
if you guys do that. Actually it
also
improve
relationship each
other
.
However
it is a
change
for more
informations
in the news and
get
closer to the promotion opportunity. Everyone should have their
own
time not everything we
see
is what it means like that. In
some
case, the solution they do is reasonable
but
not suitable or not right with others. In
constrat
one day everyone knows what you have done is unrealistic and the consequence is social will turn back with you
but
no one else can
help
you out of your problem.

In
conclusion, any kind of work has their
own
disadvantaged and from my
opion
of view I
think
paparazzi should follow and take photograph
but
in a polite way
.
Finally
, the demand from
general public
that causes the development of country's economy.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
11Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
26Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people feel that paparazzi should not follow celebrities and invade their privacy by taking pictures of them everywhere, while others believe this is just the price of fame. v. 2

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