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Some people feel that in order to improve the quality of our education we should encourage high school students to evaluate and criticise their teachers. Others feel that it will cause the loss of respect and discipline in the classroom. v.2

Some people feel that in order to improve the quality of our education we should encourage high school students to evaluate and criticise their teachers. Others feel that it will cause the loss of respect and discipline in the classroom. v. 2
It is argued whether supporting high school students for assessing their teachers in the pursuit of improving educational quality would result in disrespect and indiscipline in the classroom. This essay agrees that evaluation of teachers by secondary school students will improve the standard of education without any loss of control and respect in the classroom. Firstly, this essay will discuss why adolescent students should gauge their teachers and secondly, discuss why gauging teachers will not cause any loss of respect and discipline in the classroom. Evaluation by an adolescent student provides feedback to the teacher on improving their teaching methodologies to increase classroom participation. This will further invoke the teacher to refine ways to captivate the student’s attention. Increased participation will help the student in scoring better grades. For example, a famous school in Bangladesh named Scholastica significantly improved the performance of their students in the classroom when teachers came to know about their struggles through the teacher feedback system. Teacher evaluation will not provoke any kind of disrespectful or undisciplined behaviours by students to thrive in the classroom rather it will kerb such behaviours by boosting mutual understanding by identifying their special needs. This will provide, especially the weaker students,   a chance to express their problems in comprehending lectures and establish rapport. According to the magazine “Psychology Today”, adolescent students who never received attention from teachers will become a bully who are disrespectful and undisciplined both in and out of the classroom environment. In conclusion, assessment of teachers by high school students can not only help tuning teaching techniques but also  promote mutual understanding among each other with respect and discipline ultimately improving the quality of education.
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is argued
whether supporting high
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for assessing their
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in the pursuit of improving educational quality would result in disrespect and indiscipline in the classroom. This essay
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that evaluation of
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teachers
by secondary
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school
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will
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improve
the standard of education without any loss of control and respect in the classroom.
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, this essay will discuss why adolescent
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should gauge their
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teachers
and
secondly
, discuss why gauging
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teachers
will not cause any loss of respect and discipline in the classroom.

Evaluation by an adolescent
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student
provides feedback to the
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teacher
on improving their teaching methodologies to increase classroom participation. This will
further
invoke the
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teacher
to refine ways to captivate the
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student’s
attention. Increased participation will
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help
the
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student
in scoring better grades.
For example
, a
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famous
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school
in Bangladesh named
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Scholastica
significantly
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improved
the performance of their
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students
in the classroom when
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teachers
came to know about their struggles through the
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teacher
feedback system.

Teacher evaluation will not provoke any kind of disrespectful or undisciplined
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by
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to thrive in the classroom
rather
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will kerb
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behaviours
by boosting mutual understanding by identifying their special needs. This will provide,
especially
the weaker
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students
,
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a chance to express their problems in comprehending lectures and establish rapport. According to the magazine “Psychology
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Today
”, adolescent
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students
who never received attention from
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teachers
will become a bully who are disrespectful and undisciplined both in and out of the classroom environment.

In conclusion
, assessment of
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teachers
by high
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school
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students
can not
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only
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help
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tuning
teaching techniques
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but
also
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promote mutual understanding among each other with respect and discipline
ultimately
improving the quality of education.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people feel that in order to improve the quality of our education we should encourage high school students to evaluate and criticise their teachers. Others feel that it will cause the loss of respect and discipline in the classroom. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
279 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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