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Many people argue that in order to improve educational quality, high school students are encouraged to make comments or even criticism on their teachers. Others think it will lead to loss of respect and discipline in the classroom. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.1

Many people argue that in order to improve educational quality, high school students are encouraged to make comments or even criticism on their teachers. Others think it will lead to loss of respect and discipline in the classroom. v. 1
There has been an ongoing controversy over a concern if high school learners should be allowed to evaluate their teachers. While some people advocate that new trend because it is of benefit to educational quality improvement, I personally worry about its influence on respect and discipline in the classroom. Teacher evaluation from students, on the one hand, has some certain advantages in honing educational quality. In particular, receiving feedback from learners offers instructors a chance for self-awareness and insight on their current strengths and weaknesses. Thanks to students’ comments, teachers may know whether their teaching methods are appropriate, and then adjust their lesson plans to make study period more enjoyable and effective. Moreover, leaving comments on each lesson will engage students more in education process and encourage them to be more responsible with their own study. On the other hand, from my point of view, the new approach of teacher appraisal will result in several drawbacks. Firstly, some trouble-making students are inclined to take advantage of the chance to criticize their seniors with negative words. Therefore, such of misbehavior will possibly lead them to lose their respect for the instructors and then deteriorate the relationship between the two parties. Secondly, it is obvious that every learner could have a different thought about educational quality, and students are entitled to voice their own requirement, even to critique teachers. With numerous comments, regardless of positive or negative, it will be likely to bring a classroom to chaos, making it more difficult to keep disciplined in such study environment. In conclusion, although that students have a right to give comments on their teachers brings some benefits to quality of education, its side effects should be considered as well.
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teachers
. While
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some
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people
advocate that new trend
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because
it is of benefit to educational
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quality
improvement, I
personally
worry about its influence on respect and discipline in the classroom.

Teacher evaluation from
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students
, on the one hand, has
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some
certain advantages in honing educational
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quality
.
In particular
, receiving feedback from learners offers instructors a chance for self-awareness and insight on their
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current
strengths and weaknesses. Thanks to
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students’
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comments
,
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teachers
may know whether their teaching methods are appropriate, and then adjust their lesson plans to
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make
study period more enjoyable and effective.
Moreover
, leaving
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comments
on each lesson will engage
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students
more in education process and encourage them to be more responsible with their
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own
study.

On the other hand
, from my point of view, the new approach of
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teacher
appraisal will result in several drawbacks.
Firstly
,
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trouble-making
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students
are inclined
to take advantage of the chance to criticize their seniors with
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negative
words.
Therefore
, such of misbehavior will
possibly
lead them to lose their respect for the instructors and then deteriorate the relationship between the two parties.
Secondly
, it is obvious that every learner could have a
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different
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thought
about educational
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quality
, and
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students
are entitled
to voice their
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own
requirement, even to critique
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teachers
. With numerous
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comments
, regardless of
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positive
or
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negative
, it will be likely to bring a classroom to chaos, making it more difficult to
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keep
disciplined in such study environment.

In conclusion
, although that
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students
have a right to give
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comments
on their
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teachers
brings
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some
benefits to
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quality
of education, its side effects should
be considered
as well
.
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IELTS essay Many people argue that in order to improve educational quality, high school students are encouraged to make comments or even criticism on their teachers. Others think it will lead to loss of respect and discipline in the classroom. v. 1

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285 words
6.5
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