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In recent years some countries have experienced very rapid economic development. This has resulted in much higher standards of living in urban areas but not in the country sides. This situation may bring some problems for the country as a whole. What are these problems? How might they be reduced? v.4

In recent years some countries have experienced very rapid economic development. This has resulted in much higher standards of living in urban areas but not in the country sides. This situation may bring some problems for the country as a whole. What are these problems? How might they be reduced? v. 4
A number of countries have experienced quick economic progress recently and that in return has improved the living standards of citizens. According to some, this development has improved the city life but did almost nothing for the rural area. So the gap, in terms of economic growth, between the urban and rural areas actually hampered the overall improvement of a country. Many issues have emerged because of this discrimination that we will discuss shortly. On the other hand, different strategies and solutions can be implemented to overcome the problems which have caused by the inequality of development between cities and villages. Many cities of the world are enjoying an ever increasing economic and trade facilities. Besides, there are plenty of activities to create new infrastructure such as roads, hospitals, schools, and parks in city areas which improve the lifestyle of city dwellers. Similarly, more businesses and more job opportunities are being created in the cities. But, studies show that progress in country sides are very slow and many such rural areas do not even have basic infrastructure and job facilities. This results in the migration of people from rural areas to cities for better living. As a result, cities are also facing issues like overpopulation and pollution. Overpopulation in a city adds pressures on existing facilities like transport, education, health, and recreational places. For the same reason, there is an increase in the air, water, and noise pollution of cities that receive an influx of migrants from rural areas. The overall development of a country depends on a balanced development both in cities and rural areas and that is why developments of rural areas are also required. In order to tackle issues mentioned above, both the government and private sectors need to work together. First, they need to start constructing a strong network of road and transportation that will connect rural areas to urban areas. Thus goods and other materials can be transported efficiently and the economy and trade would flourish more. Second, the government should give subsidy to business people to establish factories and industries in the rural areas. This will create more job opportunities at the footstep of villagers, and thus improve their living standards. Thirdly, banks should give easy loans to farmers to invest in the crops and get better yield at the time of harvest. Above all, more facilities such as colleges, hospitals and playgrounds should be created in rural areas so people living there do not need to migrate to a city for a better living. To conclude, it is evident that world’s cities have gone through a rapid progression in terms of trade and development but that was not shared at same ratio with country sides. This contributed to many major metropolitan problems. But, these problems can be reduced to a greater extent, when both the government and private sectors make effort to divide funds and facilities between cities and villages.
A number of
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countries
have experienced quick economic progress recently and that in return has
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improved
the
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living
standards of citizens. According to
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some
, this
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development
has
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improved
the city life
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but
did almost nothing for the
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rural
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area
.
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So
the gap, in terms of economic growth, between the urban and
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rural
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areas
actually hampered the
overall
improvement of a
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country
.
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Many
issues have emerged
because of this
discrimination that we will discuss shortly.
On the other hand
,
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different
strategies and solutions can
be implemented
to overcome the problems which have caused by the inequality of
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development
between
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cities
and villages.

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cities
of the world are enjoying an
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ever increasing
economic and trade facilities.
Besides
, there are
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plenty
of activities to create new infrastructure such as roads, hospitals, schools, and parks in city
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areas
which
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improve
the lifestyle of city dwellers.
Similarly
, more businesses and more job opportunities are
being created
in the
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cities
.
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But
, studies
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show
that progress in
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country
sides are
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very
slow and
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many
such
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rural
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areas
do not even have basic infrastructure and job facilities. This results in the migration of
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people
from
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rural
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areas
to
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cities
for better
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living
.
As a result
,
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cities
are
also
facing issues like overpopulation and pollution. Overpopulation in a city
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adds
pressures on existing facilities like transport, education, health, and recreational places. For the same reason, there is an increase in the air, water, and noise pollution of
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cities
that receive an influx of migrants from
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rural
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areas
. The
overall
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development
of a
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country
depends on a balanced
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development
both in
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cities
and
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rural
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areas
and
that is
why
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developments
of
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rural
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areas
are
also
required.

In order to tackle issues mentioned above, both the
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government
and private sectors need to work together.
First
, they need to
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start
constructing a strong network of road and transportation that will connect
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rural
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areas
to urban
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areas
.
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Thus
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goods
and other materials can
be transported
efficiently
and the economy and trade would flourish more. Second, the
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government
should give subsidy to business
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people
to establish factories and industries in the
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rural
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areas
. This will create more job opportunities at the footstep of villagers, and
thus
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improve
their
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living
standards.
Thirdly
, banks should give easy loans to farmers to invest in the crops and
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get
better yield at the time of harvest.
Above all
, more facilities such as colleges, hospitals and playgrounds should
be created
in
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rural
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areas
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so
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people
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living
there do not need to migrate to a city for a better living.

To conclude
, it is evident that world’s
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cities
have gone through a rapid progression in terms of trade and
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development
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but
that was not shared at same ratio with
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country
sides. This contributed to
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many
major metropolitan problems.
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But
, these problems can be
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reduced
to a greater extent, when both the
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government
and private sectors
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make
effort to divide funds and facilities between
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cities
and villages.
17Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
46Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay In recent years some countries have experienced very rapid economic development. This has resulted in much higher standards of living in urban areas but not in the country sides. This situation may bring some problems for the country as a whole. What are these problems? How might they be reduced? v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
487 words
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