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Some people support agricultural developments, such as factory farming and scientific creation of fruits and vegetables. Others oppose this view. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

Some people support agricultural developments, such as factory farming and scientific creation of fruits and vegetables. Others oppose this view. v. 1
Scientists are looking for various methods such as factory farming to improve the quality and quantity of agricultural products. While some people support scientific methods of cultivation, others oppose them. In my opinion, these methods will increase the quantity of the produce; however, its quality will be affected. Farmers can significantly increase their yield by adopting scientific methods of cultivation. As population increases, the demand for food products also increases. The only way to meet this need is to increase production. Since conventional methods of farming are not very effective, modern methods like factory farming are the need of the hour. They help to increase yield and make food products available to people all over the world. Scientific methods also increase the shelf life of agricultural products. Consequently, many seasonal fruits and vegetables are now available throughout the year. Scientists have even managed to grow cold climate fruits like apples and grapes in the warm tropics. On the flip side, scientific farming may have a negative impact on the quality of the products. Animals raised in factory farms are often given steroids and antibiotics to grow faster. When people consume the meat of these animals, these chemicals also enter their body. Another source of controversy is the cultivation of GM crops. They are drought resistant and pest resistant and give excellent yields. However, even scientists are not sure whether they are fully safe for consumption. To conclude, modern methods of farming certainly increase yield and as such the adoption of such practices are required to meet the growing demand for food products. However, quality of these products is certainly a cause of concern. It will be great if scientists manage to address those concerns.
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methods
such as factory
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farming
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quality
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products
. While
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support
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scientific
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methods
of cultivation, others oppose them. In my opinion, these
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methods
will
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increase
the quantity of the produce;
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, its
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quality
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affected
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significantly
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increase
their
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yield
by adopting
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scientific
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methods
of cultivation. As population
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increases
, the demand for food
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products
also
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increases
. The
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only
way to
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meet
this need is to
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production. Since conventional
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methods
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farming
are not
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yield
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make
food
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products
available to
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people
all over the world.
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methods
also
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increase
the shelf life of agricultural
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products
.
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,
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many
seasonal fruits and vegetables are
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now
available throughout the year.
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Scientists
have even managed to grow
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cold
climate fruits like apples and grapes in the warm tropics.

On the flip side,
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scientific
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farming
may have a
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impact on the
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quality
of the
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products
. Animals raised in factory farms are
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often
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given
steroids and antibiotics to grow faster. When
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people
consume the meat of these animals, these chemicals
also
enter their body. Another source of controversy is the cultivation of GM crops. They are drought resistant and pest resistant and give excellent
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yields
.
However
, even
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scientists
are not sure whether they are
fully
safe for consumption.

To conclude
, modern
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methods
of
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farming
certainly
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increase
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yield
and as such the adoption of such practices
are required
to
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meet
the growing demand for food
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products
.
However
,
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quality
of these
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products
is
certainly
a cause of concern. It will be great if
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scientists
manage to address those concerns.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
44Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people support agricultural developments, such as factory farming and scientific creation of fruits and vegetables. Others oppose this view. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
284 words
6.5
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