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Some people consider art to be essential and others think it is not. Which view do you agree with and why? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.6

Some people consider art to be essential and others think it is not. Which view do you agree with and why? v. 6
The art has always been an integral part of people's lives. However, while some people believe that it is not that important for them, a vast majority of people consider it as a necessity. I strongly believe in this fact that art plays an important role in our lives. In this essay, I will discuss the reasons for my opinion with relevant examples. To start with, a piece of visual art is really helpful in learning visualization skills, such as the analysis of paintings, and the identification of individuals. Nevertheless, it helps people in capturing historical photographs and learning new techniques. To draw pictures of imagination is one of the popular arts. While there is a lower number of visual artists at present, many sculptures have been built by our ancestors, which are widely popular over the world. In many museums, for instance, historical paintings are displayed for the public encouragement towards art. Performing art is very popular among people, which represents their old culture and beliefs. Moreover, folk dances and plays are widely performed over the world in different religions. These are mainly for entertainment based on ancient beliefs. Nowadays, for example, classical dances are popularly performed by young artists at theatres and opera houses. Last, but not least, the literature is also one of the popular arts, which is widely recognized for learning new skills in poetry and drama. There are many old novels and biographies written by our ancestors, which are widely known for learning poetry skills. Many writers, for instance, have started following classical poetry and old stories to make their books more interesting. To sum up, we should consider art to be an integral part of our lives rather ignoring it. Furthermore, the arts could be used to learn about our culture and old values.
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, such as the analysis of paintings, and the identification of individuals.
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, it
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helps
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people
in capturing historical photographs and
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new techniques. To draw pictures of imagination is one of the
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popular
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arts
. While there is a lower number of visual artists at present,
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over the world. In
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museums,
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for the public encouragement towards art.

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old
culture and beliefs.
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widely
performed over the world in
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religions. These are
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learning
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in poetry and drama. There are
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novels and biographies written by our ancestors, which are
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known for
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learning
poetry
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following classical poetry and
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old
stories to
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make
their books more interesting.

To sum up, we should consider
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art
to be an integral part of our
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lives
rather
ignoring it.
Furthermore
, the
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arts
could be
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used
to learn about our culture and
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old
values.
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IELTS essay Some people consider art to be essential and others think it is not. Which view do you agree with and why? v. 6

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
300 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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