Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

When designing a building, the most important factor is intended use of the building rather than its outward appearance. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.6

When designing a building, the most important factor is intended use of the building rather than its outward appearance. v. 6
Development of underprivileged countries in regard to the welfare and literacy of their people as well as their domestic production and commercial relations is crucial, and developed nations should be held more accountable to take required measures to assist them in this regard. This essay agrees with this statement and it will mention some of the key reasons why. Foremost among reasons to help poorer countries appears to come from a historical perspective. That is to say that developed countries benefited from inexpensive natural resources and workforce, coming from these underprivileged nations, for centuries, which has boosted their economies. Furthermore, first-world nations colluded with politicians and people of power in underdeveloped nations to influence national politics, overthrow governments, and divide indigenous people. This has often led to civil wars in these countries, such as Ethiopia and Angola, and they are still suffering from the consequences thereof, namely sickness epidemics and adult illiteracy. That is why developed nations should help alleviate the problems which they apparently engendered. Another prime reason to provide aid to poor countries appears to be the broad extent of their problems. Unless international organizations take globally-coordinated measures to elevate health, education and socioeconomic situation in underdeveloped nations, the local authorities would not have the required resources and knowledge to confront the issues. For example, finding a cure for illnesses, such as Malaria, requires international cooperation and funding, which if not provided, might result in an epidemic that can result in our collective demise. In conclusion, either from a historical point of view or a more self-concerning one, developed countries shall better hold themselves accountable to help less-developed nations alleviate their miseries, such as famine or drought. These miseries could escalate quickly to a global level which might harm all humanity.
Development of underprivileged
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
in regard to the welfare and literacy of their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
as well
as their domestic production and commercial relations is crucial, and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
developed
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nations
should
be held
more accountable to take required measures to assist them in this regard. This essay
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agrees
with this statement and it will mention
If the text is a generality, 'of the' is not necessary. Did you mean "some"?
some of the
key reasons why.

Foremost among reasons to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
poorer
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
appears to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
from a historical perspective.
That is
to say that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
developed
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
benefited from inexpensive natural resources and workforce, coming from these underprivileged
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nations
, for centuries, which has boosted their economies.
Furthermore
,
first
-world
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nations
colluded with politicians and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
of power in underdeveloped
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nations
to influence national politics, overthrow
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
, and divide indigenous
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
. This has
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
led to civil wars in these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
, such as Ethiopia and Angola, and they are
still
suffering from the consequences thereof,
namely
sickness epidemics and adult illiteracy.
That is
why
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
developed
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nations
should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
alleviate the problems which they
apparently
engendered.

Another prime reason to provide aid to poor
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
appears to be the broad extent of their problems. Unless international organizations take globally-coordinated measures to elevate health, education and socioeconomic situation in underdeveloped
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nations
, the local authorities would not have the required resources and knowledge to confront the issues.
For example
, finding a cure for illnesses, such as Malaria, requires international cooperation and funding, which
Did you mean "is"?
if
not provided, might result in an epidemic that can result in our collective demise.

In conclusion
, either from a historical point of view or a more self-concerning one,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
developed
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
shall better hold themselves accountable to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
less-developed
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nations
alleviate their miseries, such as famine or drought. These miseries could escalate
quickly
to a global level which might harm all humanity.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay When designing a building, the most important factor is intended use of the building rather than its outward appearance. v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
293 words
7.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • When designing a building, the most important factor is intended use of the building rather than its outward appearance. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.6