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Some people claim that living in big cities is creating difficulties whereas others think it makes easier. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.2

Some people claim that living in big cities is creating difficulties whereas others think it makes easier. v. 2
People have different perspective regarding residing in metropolitan areas. Some people claim that urbanised lifestyles make easier for the residents for the quality of living standards and one’s convenience, whereas others believe that gathering into big cities causes environmental and psychological illness making people’s life more difficult. This essay will discuss both aspects for living in metropolitan areas before reaching a reasonable conclusion. Some people have a belief that the quality of lifestyles is better in urban areas. Since the urban cities provide various technologies and services for comfortable lifestyles, people can enjoy the comfortable and convenient facilities and services. For instance, the frequent transportation and 24/7 available shopping malls provide the convenient lifestyles where people can commute fast or buy groceries at their convenient times. Along with this, people can enhance their relationships from surrounded by a lot of people. Usually big cities are gathered by majority of people and this increases the opportunity for human interactions. The more people are surrounded by others there will be more chances to increase social interactions. For example, there are many social events occurring in big cities and majority of them have a purpose of social bonding. In contrast, some might disagree to live in big cities. The first and foremost reason is the environmental factors. The highly dense populated area creates massive environmental issues such as greenhouse gases, pollution, noise and congestion. Due to all these issues, people suffer various health issues and that can be the reason for the difficulties to reside in cities. Moreover, the urbanised areas are usually having a high competitive market. This competitive environment results in stressful lifestyles. A persistent accumulation of stresses and being exposed to the competitive environments, people would face the risk of psychological distress. In other words, this can result of many negative acts from too much stresses such as crimes, misbehave, distrust, depression, bully and societal isolation. In my opinion, even though metropolitan areas can provide the quality of technology and services for comfortable residents’ lifestyles, the environmental and psychological aspects cannot be ignored. With all those technological and services cannot recover psychological and environmental damages. Since those damages are taking longer to recover, the difficult urbanised lifestyles should not be favoured. The possession of comfortable lifestyles also cannot be claimed as an easy lifestyle by having all the negative side effects of urbanised lifestyles. In conclusion, there are different perspectives for residing in big areas. Comfortable lifestyles are the most obvious advantages for living in big cities but the psychological and environmental aspects cannot be forgotten.
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claim that
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urbanised
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lifestyles
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make
easier for the residents for the quality of living standards and one’s convenience, whereas others believe that gathering into
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big
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cities
causes
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environmental
and
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psychological
illness making
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people’s
life more difficult. This essay will discuss both aspects for living in metropolitan
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areas
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before
reaching a reasonable conclusion.

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Some
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people
have a belief that the quality of
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lifestyles
is better in urban
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areas
. Since the urban
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cities
provide various technologies and
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services
for
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comfortable
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lifestyles
,
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people
can enjoy the
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comfortable
and convenient facilities and
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services
.
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, the frequent transportation and 24/7 available shopping malls provide the convenient
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lifestyles
where
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people
can commute
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fast
or
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buy
groceries at their convenient times.

Along with this,
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people
can enhance their relationships from surrounded by
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a lot of
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people
.
Usually
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big
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cities
are gathered
by majority of
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people
and this increases the opportunity for human interactions. The more
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people
are surrounded
by others there will be more chances to increase social interactions.
For example
, there are
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many
social
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events
occurring in
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big
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cities
and
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majority of
them have a purpose of social bonding.

In contrast
,
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some
might disagree to
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live
in
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big
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cities
. The
first
and foremost reason is the
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environmental
factors. The
highly
dense populated
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area
creates massive
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environmental
issues such as greenhouse gases, pollution, noise and congestion. Due to all these issues,
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people
suffer various health issues and that can be the reason for the difficulties to reside in
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cities
.
Moreover
, the
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urbanised
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areas
are
usually
having a high competitive market. This competitive environment results in stressful
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lifestyles
. A persistent accumulation of
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stresses
and
being exposed
to the competitive environments,
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people
would face the
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risk
of
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psychological
distress.
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, this can result of
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many
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negative
acts from too
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much
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stresses
such as crimes, misbehave, distrust, depression, bully and societal isolation.

In my opinion,
even though
metropolitan
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areas
can provide the quality of technology and
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services
for
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comfortable
residents’
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lifestyles
, the
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environmental
and
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psychological
aspects cannot be
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ignored
. With all those technological and
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services
cannot recover
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psychological
and
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environmental
damages. Since those damages are taking longer to recover, the difficult
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urbanised
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lifestyles
should not be
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favoured
. The possession of
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comfortable
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lifestyles
also
cannot
be claimed
as an easy
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lifestyle
by having all the
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negative
side effects of
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urbanised
lifestyles.

In conclusion
, there are
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different
perspectives for residing in
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big
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areas
.
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Comfortable
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lifestyles
are the most obvious advantages for living in
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big
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cities
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but
the
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psychological
and
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environmental
aspects cannot
be forgotten
.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
62Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people claim that living in big cities is creating difficulties whereas others think it makes easier. v. 2

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
426 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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