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Some people say that living in high-rise apartments feels very lonely and makes people unhappy. Others say there are advantages to living in a big apartment building. Discuss both views and give your own opinion v.1

Some people say that living in high-rise apartments feels very lonely and makes people unhappy. Others say there are advantages to living in a big apartment building. 1
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Most of the
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people
like to
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buy
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products
by watching
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advertisements
as they have a great influence of
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advertisements
. This trend has more
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positive
aspects over negatives. This essay will ponder upon the both aspects;
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before
approaching down to any logical conclusion.

One of the prominent benefits of this trend is that
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people
can
easily
be aware about the quality of
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products
which they want to
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buy
for their daily
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use
.
For example
, a person can choose from a toothpaste to electronic gadget
wisely
with the
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help
of
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advertisement
.
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Where
he/she can compare the benefits with other similar
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product
through
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advertisements
simultaneously
a person can compare the costs without going to market which can save his/her precious time.

Not
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only
this, influence of
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advertisements
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makes
it easy for
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government
to motivate public for a
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positive
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change
. Such as,
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people
can be aware about the harmful substances like tobacco and cigarettes via
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advertisements
. To better exemplify, the Indian
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government
has
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canalised
an initiate to aware
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people
about cleanliness with the aid of television
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advertisement
.
Use "a Thousand" or use a number before 'Thousand'.
Thousand
of
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people
have become a part of this reform and putting their
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hard
efforts to
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keep
their surroundings clean.

However
,
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sometimes
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advertisements
can
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befool
the
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people
by showing false information related to the
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product
.
For instance
, a person can
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come
to know about the features of the
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product
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but
cannot know about the quality
likewise
the quality of textile cannot
be judged
by watching it in pictures.
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But
it should be in
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people
hand that they should
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buy
the
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goods
after exploring them in detail without believing
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advertisements
blindly
.

In conclusion
,
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advertisements
affect
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people
in both
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positive
and
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negative
ways.
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But
they should be proactive
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before
purchasing anything by watching
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advertisements
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that living in high-rise apartments feels very lonely and makes people unhappy. Others say there are advantages to living in a big apartment building. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
285 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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