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Some people claim that it is acceptable to use animals in medical research for the benefit of human beings, while other people argue that it is wrong. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.12

Some people claim that it is acceptable to use animals in medical research for the benefit of human beings, while other people argue that it is wrong. v. 12
It is true that medicines and other products are tested on animals bring numerous advantages for people. While many people believe that humanity should be undertaken those experiments, I would argue that animal testing is morally wrong. On the one hand, there are a variety of reasons why a limited amount of animal research is necessary for the development of medicines. Firstly, experiments using animals also have been taken into action for so long time, which support for experts to invent diseases treatments. As a result, it helps people to improve the standard of living. Secondly, some studies are dangerous for the human, whereas, it is safe toward some particular creatures. For instance, supporters in the use of animals in medical research believe that a certain amount of suffering on the part of mice or rats can be justified if human lives are saved. On the other hand, I suppose that they should not use animals for mankind purposes like medical tests. One reason is that animals play an important role in the balance of the ecosystem of the biodiversity process on earth. People should protect them because many wild animals are killed just for medical experiments. In addition, it is an unethical action that Government has enacted laws to save creatures, especially rare animals. To be specific, laboratory rabbit may be given an illness so that the effectiveness of a new drug can be measured. In conclusion, although whether to use animals or not for benefit of humanity is still a controversial issue, it seems to me that it is better when stopping creature testing to ensure that the next generation could exploit the animal resource.
It is true that medicines and other products are
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tested
on
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animals
bring numerous advantages for
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people
. While
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many
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people
believe that humanity should be undertaken those experiments, I would argue that
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animal
testing is
morally
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wrong
.

On the one hand, there are a variety of reasons why a limited amount of
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animal
research is necessary for the development of medicines.
Firstly
, experiments using
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animals
also
have
been taken
into action for
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so
long time, which support for experts to invent diseases treatments.
As a result
, it
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helps
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people
to
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improve
the standard of living.
Secondly
,
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some
studies are
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dangerous
for the human, whereas, it is safe toward
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some
particular creatures.
For instance
, supporters in the
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use
of
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animals
in medical research believe that a certain amount of suffering on the part of mice or rats can
be justified
if human
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lives
are saved
.

On the other hand
, I suppose that they should not
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use
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animals
for mankind purposes like medical
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tests
. One reason is that
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animals
play an
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important
role in the balance of the ecosystem of the biodiversity process on earth.
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People
should protect them
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because
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many
wild
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animals
are killed
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just
for medical experiments.
In addition
, it is an unethical action that
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Government
has enacted laws to save creatures,
especially
rare
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animals
. To be specific, laboratory rabbit may be
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given
an illness
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so
that the effectiveness of a new drug can
be measured
.

In conclusion
, although whether to
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use
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animals
or not for benefit of humanity is
still
a controversial issue, it seems to me that it is better when stopping creature testing to ensure that the
next
generation could exploit the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animal
resource.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people claim that it is acceptable to use animals in medical research for the benefit of human beings, while other people argue that it is wrong. v. 12

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
277 words
6.5
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