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Some people claim that government should take action to ensure that people have a healthy lifestyle. Others, however, disagree and believe people should decide themselves which way they want to live their life v.3

Some people claim that government should take action to ensure that people have a healthy lifestyle. Others, however, disagree and believe people should decide themselves which way they want to live their life v. 3
Since tons of rules have come to an act, people' s lifestyle has been bounded by these rules to a great extend. It has been a burning issue that whether lifestyle of people ought to be supervised by government or they himself should let free to decide their fate. Here, i would like to discuss both views with my opinion It is argued that lifestyle of people should be in government' s hand. Lifestyle without supervision can lead to several problems as people will have independence to do things according to their desires, whether good or bad, they will perform all illegal activities freely, this situation can lead to lots of crime. Furthermore, government has power to regulate people' s lifestyle in better way by bringing some laws in practice. Hence, government should step forward and take care of lifestyle of people for the betterment of their country. Other' s have conflicting views, according to them, this is era of democracy where people are liable for taking their decision on their own for their bright tomorrow. They believe that, people are educated enough and they know what is better for them. therefore, they should set free to live their lives accordingly as it can be complicated for government to regulate every single one' s lifestyle in big populated countries. In my notion, everyone should be allocated with rights that they could supervise their lifestyle according to their desires to a certain extend. But, government should also associate in order to eliminate those illegal activities which are taking place on name of lifestyle. To be specific, usage of drugs have been mammoth over the past few years on name of lifestyle. however, such trend ought to be outlawed by government To recapitulate, there should be a mutual level in determining lifestyle of people. All the legal activities should be taken care by people and government should involve when lifestyle leads to commit any crime
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lifestyle
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extend
. It has been a burning issue that whether
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lifestyle
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people
ought to
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government or
they himself should
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let
free to decide their fate. Here,
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i
would like to discuss both views with my opinion

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lifestyle
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people
should be in
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government&
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without supervision can lead to several problems as
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people
will have independence to do things according to their desires, whether
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good
or
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, they will perform all illegal activities
freely
, this situation can lead to lots of crime.
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government
has power to regulate
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people&
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lifestyle
in better way by bringing
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some
laws in practice.
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,
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government
should step forward and take care of
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lifestyle
of
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people
for the betterment of their country.

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people
are liable for taking their decision on their
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for their bright tomorrow. They believe that,
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people
are educated
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enough and
they know what is better for them.
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therefore
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government
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lifestyle
in
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big
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be allocated
with rights that they could supervise their
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lifestyle
according to their desires to a certain
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extend
.
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But
,
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government
should
also
associate in order to eliminate those illegal activities which are taking place on name of
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lifestyle
. To be specific, usage of drugs have been mammoth over the past few years on name of
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lifestyle
.
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however
, such trend ought to
be outlawed
by
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government


To recapitulate, there should be a mutual level in determining
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lifestyle
of
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people
. All the legal activities should
be taken
care by
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people
and
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government
should involve when
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lifestyle
leads to commit any
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crime
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people claim that government should take action to ensure that people have a healthy lifestyle. Others, however, disagree and believe people should decide themselves which way they want to live their life v. 3

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
322 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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