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# Some people choose to eat no meat or fish. they believe that this not only better for their own health but also benefits the world as a whole. Discuss the view and give your own opinion. v.12

# Some people choose to eat no meat or fish. they believe that this not only better for their own health but also benefits the world as a whole. Discuss the view and give your own opinion. v. 12
In every part of the world, meat and fish are highly consumed. Many people prefer to not eat them because they believe that it is not only better for their personal health. They also think it benefits the world in general. This essay will discuss mainly the advantages of choosing to not eat them as a whole. There are more advantages than disadvantages for not choosing to eat them. The first edge to a lot of people is a healthy and well shaped body. For example, more than 50 years ago when the major source of feeding was fresh, natural produce gotten from harvesting in the farm. Most of the food available then was fresh vegetables even though there was animal meat to eat a little from time to time, but they were not the main course of the day. The second advantage, linked to the first, is the healthy eating lifestyle they were already used to and the addition of exercising to enhance long life and a good body shape. Personally, I think a lot of people who talk against not eating them are the people that don't have a medical condition yet that requires them to stay away from protein. Discussions and awareness campaigns need to happen to educate many young people on the advantages of rapid reduction and complete abstinence from the consumption. For instance, Tv and radio stations should present troubling facts the body experiences when people sit and consume a 50kg worth of steak in one sitting. In addition to warning people, such projects could educate them better on practical balance in consumptions of the proteins. In conclusion, unless efforts are made to help the public consciously stay away, it will escalate into a problem and individuals need to take responsibility for their eating habits.
In every part of the world, meat and fish are
highly
consumed.
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Many
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people
prefer to not
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eat
them
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because
they believe that it is not
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only
better for their personal health. They
also
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think
it benefits the world
in general
. This essay will discuss
mainly
the
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advantages
of choosing to not
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eat
them as a whole.

There are more
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advantages
than disadvantages for not choosing to
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eat
them. The
first
edge to
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a lot of
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people
is a healthy and well shaped body.
For example
, more than 50 years ago when the major source of feeding was fresh, natural produce gotten from harvesting in the farm. Most of the food available then was fresh vegetables
even though
there was animal meat to
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eat
a
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little
from time to time,
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but
they were not the main course of the day. The second
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advantage
, linked to the
first
, is the healthy eating lifestyle they were already
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used
to and the addition of exercising to enhance long life and a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
body shape.

Personally
, I
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think
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a lot of
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people
who talk against not eating them are the
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people
that don't have a medical condition
yet
that requires them to stay away from protein. Discussions and awareness campaigns need to happen to educate
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many
young
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people
on the
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advantages
of rapid reduction and complete abstinence from the consumption.
For instance
,
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Tv
and radio stations should present troubling facts the body experiences when
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
sit and consume a
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50kg
worth of steak in one sitting.
In addition
to warning
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people
, such projects could educate them better on practical balance in
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consumptions
of the proteins.

In conclusion
, unless efforts
are made
to
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help
the public
consciously
stay away, it will escalate into a problem and individuals need to take responsibility for their eating habits.
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IELTS essay # Some people choose to eat no meat or fish. they believe that this not only better for their own health but also benefits the world as a whole. Discuss the view and give your own opinion. v. 12

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
300 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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