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Some people choose to eat no meat or fish. They believe that this is not only better for their own health but also benefits the world as a whole. Discuss this view and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.1

Some people choose to eat no meat or fish. They believe that this is not only better for their own health but also benefits the world as a whole. Discuss this view and give your own opinion. v. 1
A section of society has been observed to consume only vegetarian food because they believe it to be good for the body and the earth. In my opinion, it is a personal choice to eat a vegetarian diet; however, a person cannot stay healthy or save the planet by restricting the non-vegetarian diet. To begin with, the foremost reason that proves the non-vegetarian food healthy is the availability of certain essential nutrients which are present only in animal meat or seafood. Additionally, there should be a variety of food, so that the body gets all the essential elements to stay fit and healthy. For example, if a person just relies on plants then he would become deficient in vitamin B, which can be obtained only from animals. Similarly, the sea-food provides Omega-3 which is present only in fish. Thus, food derived from animals is equally important for maintaining good health. Another reason for not restricting the non-vegetarian food is it balances the ecosystem. Admittedly, if animals like goats and sheep are not consumed by mankind then it may happen that their number grows drastically and may create a problem in the environment. As a result, it is proper to consume non-vegetarian food along with vegetarian meals, which will keep their numbers in check. In conclusion, I pen down saying that one should have a variety of food types in diet and should not restrict himself to just vegetarian food. The food from land and sea animals certainly is beneficial to overall health and eating just fruits and plants would make the body weak and deficient in essential vitamins. Moreover, the food chain and ecosystem can also be managed effectively if we include meat and fish in our diet.
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been observed
to consume
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vegetarian
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food
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because
they believe it to be
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good
for the body and the earth. In my opinion, it is a personal choice to eat a vegetarian diet;
however
, a person cannot stay healthy or save the planet by restricting the non-vegetarian diet.

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begin
with, the foremost reason that proves the non-vegetarian
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food
healthy is the availability of certain essential nutrients which are present
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only
in
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animal
meat or seafood.
Additionally
, there should be a variety of
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food
,
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so
that the body
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gets
all the essential elements to stay fit and healthy.
For example
, if a person
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just
relies on plants then he would become deficient in vitamin B, which can
be obtained
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only
from
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animals
.
Similarly
, the sea-food provides Omega-3 which is present
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only
in fish.
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,
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food
derived from
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animals
is
equally
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important
for maintaining
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good
health.

Another reason for not restricting the non-vegetarian
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food
is it balances the ecosystem.
Admittedly
, if
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animals
like goats and sheep are not consumed by mankind then it may happen that their number grows
drastically
and may create a problem in the environment.
As a result
, it is proper to consume non-vegetarian
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food
along with vegetarian meals, which will
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keep
their numbers in
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check
.

In conclusion
, I pen down saying that one should have a variety of
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food
types in diet and should not restrict himself to
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just
vegetarian
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food
. The
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food
from land and sea
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animals
certainly
is beneficial to
overall
health and eating
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just
fruits and plants would
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make
the body weak and deficient in essential vitamins.
Moreover
, the
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food
chain and ecosystem can
also
be managed
effectively
if we include meat and fish in our diet.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people choose to eat no meat or fish. They believe that this is not only better for their own health but also benefits the world as a whole. Discuss this view and give your own opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
288 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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