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some people believe today we have too many choices. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.1

some people believe today we have too many choices. with this statement? v. 1
In addition, day by day the modern society is developing many facilities to select the variant options. This solution has a great impacted in everyone's life. However, I will discuss the pros and merits in following paragraphs. However, having the possibilities to choose whatever we want is such the mind-blowing feeling that sometime people cannot express also with words. Thanks to the wide range of advantages it offers, not only benefit more when it comes to being effective, but they can also enhance the productivity and quality of their lives with much ease and efficacy. For instance, people's also have the possibilities to choice their study and also the jobs that are not related to their studies. Another proses to the choices also could be related to tourism destinations and spending the holidays according to moods. On the other hand, it is not 100% surely that people's have many choices because there are also many cases in which destiny pick the decision for us and we cannot take as well. To illustrate, I have seen many cases in which people have the option but a front of the destiny they have to bend their knees. Moreover, God has decided the best decisions for everybody so having the choice or do not have it doesn't matter because in this world will be happen that God will allow on our lives. In conclusion, people's trust that they have a lot of choices for everything's but there are also some occurrence in which a human could not do nothing and have not the controls in their hands. I disagree with that, people have various choices.
In addition
, day by day the modern society is developing
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many
facilities to select the variant options. This solution has a great impacted in everyone's life.
However
, I will discuss the pros and merits in following paragraphs.

However
, having the possibilities to choose whatever we want is such the mind-blowing feeling that sometime
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people
cannot express
also
with words. Thanks to the wide range of advantages it offers, not
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only
benefit more when it
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comes
to being effective,
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but
they can
also
enhance the productivity and quality of their
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lives
with much
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ease
and efficacy.
For instance
,
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people
's
also
have the possibilities to
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choice
their study and
also
the jobs that are not related to their studies. Another
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proses
to the
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choices
also
could
be related
to tourism destinations and spending the holidays according to moods.

On the other hand
, it is not 100%
surely
that
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people
's have
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many
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choices
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because
there are
also
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many
cases in which destiny
Consider using third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: "picks".
pick
the decision for
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
us and
we cannot take
as well
. To illustrate, I have
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seen
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many
cases in which
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people
have the option
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but
a front of the destiny they
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have to
bend their knees.
Moreover
, God has decided the best decisions for everybody
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so
The pronoun 'everybody' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "has", "had".
having
the
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choice
or do not have it doesn't matter
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because
in this world will be
Consider using the past participle "happened"?
happen
that God will
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allow
on our
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lives
.

In conclusion
,
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people
's trust that they have
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a lot of
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choices
for everything's
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but
there are
also
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some
occurrence in which a human could
Double negatives are discouraged in standard English. Can you reformulate this phrase or is a comma missing?
not do nothing
and have not the controls in their hands. I disagree with that,
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people
have various
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
choices
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay some people believe today we have too many choices. with this statement? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
272 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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