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Some people believe the government should spend money on building train and subway lines to reduce traffic congestion. Others think that building more and wider roads is the better way to reduce traffic congestion. Discuss both views and give your opinion v.7

Some people believe the government should spend money on building train and subway lines to reduce traffic congestion. Others think that building more and wider roads is the better way to reduce traffic congestion. 7
In recent years, there has been opposite views in the ways to fight the traffic congestion. Some people are of the opinion that the government should spend on building trains and subways where as others contend that constructing more and wider roads is the best way to reduce traffic. Considering human needs and safety, I strongly believe that the government should fund the railway and subway projects for two reasons. To begin with, trains and subways are relatively safer and secured as far as the public safety is concerned. For example, the roadways are well-developed in Texas in USA. While taking a an online driving certification test, I learned that the rate of road traffic accidents has dramatically increases in Texas in the this decade as compared to the last one costing number of precious and innocent human lives. The victims suffer from lifelong disabilities or families lose their loved ones for no reason. These painful events can be impeded to a large extend if people avoid driving cars and commute through public transportation services like trains. In addition, development and use of local railways and subways by the civilians will curtail the environmental harms caused by the humans. Widening and increasing the driving lanes will not reduce the running cars on the road but also promote the citizens to use personal means of transport over the public ones. The fuel burned while driving the cars is realising the harmful gases in environment thus accelerating global climate change and global warming. I came across a news article recently which claims that the CO2 index has reached the alarming limit in Delhi and Bangalore in India. As repercussion the public is suffering from more pulmonary illnesses which is affecting their quality of life. It seems we humans are digging our own grave. Lately, many countries have agreed with WHO to fight the environmental pollution by developing sprawling the public transportation but unfortunately, US did not. Certainly, similar to United Kingdom, if the federal system of United States of America raises funds to build more efficient railway and subway systems all over the country, it can definitely contribute to save the global environment. To recapitulate, I subscribe the idea of funding and constructing more railway lines by the government. This will not only ensure public safety but also fight the environmental issues.
In recent years, there has been opposite views in the ways to fight the traffic congestion.
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people
are of the opinion that the
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government
should spend on building trains and
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subways
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others contend that constructing more and wider roads is the best way to
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traffic. Considering
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needs and safety, I
strongly
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government
should fund the
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and
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subway
projects for two reasons.

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with, trains and
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subways
are
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safer and secured as far as the
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public
safety
is concerned
.
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online
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driving
certification
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test
, I learned that the rate of road traffic accidents has
dramatically
increases in Texas in
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the this
decade as compared to the last one costing number of precious and innocent
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human
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. The victims suffer from lifelong disabilities or families lose their
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ones
for no reason. These painful
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can
be impeded
to a large extend if
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people
avoid
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driving
cars and commute through
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public
transportation services like trains.

In addition
, development and
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use
of local
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railways
and
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subways
by the civilians will curtail the environmental harms caused by the
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humans
. Widening and increasing the
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driving
lanes will not
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reduce
the running cars on the road
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but
also
promote the citizens to
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use
personal means of transport over the
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public
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ones
. The fuel burned while
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the cars
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is realising
the harmful gases in environment
thus
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change
and global warming. I came across a news article recently which claims that the CO2 index has reached the alarming limit in Delhi and Bangalore in India.
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As
repercussion the
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is suffering from more pulmonary illnesses which is affecting their quality of life. It seems we
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humans
are digging our
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grave. Lately,
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many
countries have
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agreed
with
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WHO
to fight the environmental pollution by developing sprawling the
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public
transportation
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unfortunately, US did not.
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, similar
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to United Kingdom
, if the federal system
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of United States
of America raises funds to build more efficient
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railway
and
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subway
systems all over the country, it can definitely contribute to save the global environment.

To recapitulate, I subscribe the
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idea
of funding and constructing more
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railway
lines by the
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government
. This will not
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only
ensure
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public
safety
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also
fight the environmental issues.
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IELTS essay Some people believe the government should spend money on building train and subway lines to reduce traffic congestion. Others think that building more and wider roads is the better way to reduce traffic congestion. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
390 words
6.0
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