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Some people believe the government should construct more railway tracks while others think they should improve existing vehicles Discuss both views and give your opinion v.2

Some people believe the government should construct more railway tracks while others think they should improve existing vehicles 2
Around the world, some people think government should build inter city railway tracks while others believe present public vehicles should be improved. In my opinion, the running public transports should be enhanced as some of them are too old and to decrease traffic jam those vehicles are necessary. The transport mediums which are controlled by the states are sometimes too aged. Even though those cars are still in service, they are not strong enough. As a result, accidents occur every now and then. However, as coaches are very ancient, working persons often become late to their offices for the slow rate of speed. For instance, Bangladesh government still using Bedford buses which was brought to service in early 19th century. Moreover, they have become burden for the government and it is obvious for the reign to replace them. Again, couple of families are using more than one car. For every individual family member of a family, there is an individual car. These causing a great standstill situation all over when all the family persons get on the road at the same time. So, to discourage the use of private cars govern body might take some steps like bringing attractive public transportation which can only possible if the old vehicles are thrown away. For example, In our country some government buses are introduced from north part of the Dhaka city to south part. After the introduction of the bus, many commuters are using it because it is so luxurious like those are air conditioned and seats are comfortable. On the other hand, if railway paths are organised then it will take less time to reach from one place to another. In addition, the users of train have to spend less than the bus passenger as the ticket price are too low. In conclusion, though some people argue for the construction of more rail lines and it has some advantages but in my opinion to get better service and to decrease traffic jam it is obvious that the government should concentrate on recent public transport.
Around the world,
some
people
think
government
should build inter city railway
tracks
while others believe present
public
vehicles should be
improved
. In my opinion, the running
public
transports should
be enhanced
as
some
of them are too
old
and to decrease traffic jam those vehicles are necessary.

The transport mediums which
are controlled
by the states are
sometimes
too aged.
Even though
those
cars
are
still
in service, they are not strong
enough
.
As a result
, accidents occur every
now
and then.
However
, as coaches are
very
ancient, working persons
often
become late to their offices for the slow rate of speed.
For instance
, Bangladesh
government
still
using Bedford buses which
was brought
to service in early 19th century.
Moreover
, they have become burden for the
government
and it is obvious for the reign to replace them.

Again,
couple of
families
are using more than one
car
. For every individual
family
member of a
family
, there is an individual
car
. These causing a great standstill situation all over when all the
family
persons
get
on the road at the same time.
So
, to discourage the
use
of private
cars
govern body might take
some
steps like bringing attractive
public
transportation which can
only
possible if the
old
vehicles
are thrown
away.
For example
, In our country
some
government
buses
are introduced
from north part of the Dhaka city to south part. After the introduction of the bus,
many
commuters are using it
because
it is
so
luxurious like those are
air conditioned
and seats are comfortable.

On the other hand
, if railway paths are
organised
then it will take less time to reach from one place to another.
In addition
, the users of train
have to
spend less than the bus passenger as the ticket price are too low.

In conclusion
, though
some
people
argue for the construction of more rail lines and it has
some
advantages
but
in my opinion to
get
better service and to decrease traffic jam it is obvious that the
government
should concentrate on recent
public
transport.
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IELTS essay Some people believe the government should construct more railway tracks while others think they should improve existing vehicles 2

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