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Some people believe that watching TV is good and makes life more enjoyable. Others, however, feel that it is a waste of time. Do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion. v.1

Some people believe that watching TV is good and makes life more enjoyable. Others, however, feel that it is a waste of time. Give your opinion. v. 1
Television has affected our life considerably since its invention. It has created two opposite schools of thought on the ground of its serviceability. There is one who believes it to be a source of amusement and there are others who oppose this notion and consider it a waste of hours. This essay intends to discuss both the views and will reach to a subsequent conclusion why I consider the idiot box is a source of entertainment. To begin with, the advent of technology and globalization has made the world materialistic and their schedules busy. Consequently, they hardly get any time for entertainment, but it is television that is there to make a change in their boring and hectic schedules. For example, there are countless entertaining programs with different genres like comedy, news, daily soaps and discoveries around the world. Therefore, it serves the purpose of all categories and also keeps the people updated with the happenings around the world. On the other hand, there are masses who believe that it makes time futile because people spend their time watching televisions and keep on procrastinate the crucial things. Thence, this brings instability in their decision making power and affects them physically and emotionally. For instance, addiction to television becomes so worse that they some times end up being a couch potato. Therefore, making television as an inseparable twin is creates such adverse effects that it lowers the productivity of the person. To conclude, television as always been transmitting information in both audio and video format. I believe that viewing it for a certain limit can act as an entertainer and educator. This essay discussed how positively it is acting as a stress-buster and also discussed that misuse can lead to sluggish life.
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has
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affected
our life
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since its invention. It has created two opposite schools of
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thought
on the ground of its serviceability. There is one who believes it to be a source of amusement and there are others who oppose this notion and consider it a waste of hours. This essay intends to discuss both the views and will reach to a subsequent conclusion why I consider the idiot box is a source of entertainment.

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with, the advent of technology and globalization has made the world materialistic and their schedules busy.
Consequently
, they hardly
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get
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time
for entertainment,
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that is
there to
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in their boring and hectic schedules.
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, there are countless entertaining programs with
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different
genres like comedy, news, daily soaps and discoveries around the world.
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, it serves the purpose of all categories and
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keeps
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people
updated with the happenings around the world.

On the other hand
, there are masses who believe that it
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futile
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televisions
and
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on procrastinate the crucial things. Thence, this brings instability in their
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power and affects them
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.
For instance
, addiction to
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television
becomes
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worse that they
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up being a couch potato.
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, making
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television
as an inseparable twin is creates such adverse effects that it lowers the productivity of the person.

To conclude
,
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television
as always been transmitting information in both audio and video format. I believe that viewing it for a certain limit can act as an entertainer and educator. This essay discussed how
positively
it is acting as a
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stress
-buster and
also
discussed that misuse can lead to sluggish life.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that watching TV is good and makes life more enjoyable. Others, however, feel that it is a waste of time. Give your opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
291 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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