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More and more people are working at home rather than in the workplace. Some people say this will bring benefits to the workers and their families, others think this will bring stress to the home. Discuss both the views and give your opinion v.1

More and more people are working at home rather than in the workplace. Some people say this will bring benefits to the workers and their families, others think this will bring stress to the home. 1
On the one hand, those who advocate that working from home is useful for the workers and families feel that it gives them the flexibility to work as per their convenience. This is because when they are not going to the job they need not follow the usual office hours. As a result, they choose to work at a time when their productivity is the highest. Furthermore, by not going to office, they save travelling time which can be utilized to work on their assignments and finish them early so that they can spend more time with their family members. On the other hand, for many reasons, I believe that this option leads to more tension in the family life. Firstly, there is no limit to how long one should sit and work at home. This absence of rules at home usually leads to people working longer than normal routine, which is one of the prime reasons for domestic fights. Secondly, people miss important informal communication that happens over tea in the office. For example, they may not get to hear about new vacancies that have arisen in the workplace. This can result in frustration and they might take this out on their family members. To conclude, although working from home provides one with the convenience of working at any time and the opportunity to spend more time with family I believe it can lead to tense situations at home because of lack of set rules and the chance to socialize with co-workers. Do you have an essay on this topic? Submit it below in the comments for a free band score estimate
On the one hand, those who advocate that
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working
from home is useful for the workers and
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families
feel that it gives them the flexibility to
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work
as per their convenience. This is
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because
when they are not going to the job they need not follow the usual office hours.
As a result
, they choose to
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work
at a
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time
when their productivity is the highest.
Furthermore
, by not going to office, they save travelling
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time
which can
be utilized
to
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work
on their assignments and finish them early
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so
that they can spend more
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time
with their
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family
members.

On the other hand
, for
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many
reasons, I believe that this option leads to more tension in the
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family
life.
Firstly
, there is no limit to how long one should sit and
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work
at home. This absence of
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rules
at home
usually
leads to
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people
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working
longer than normal routine, which is one of the prime reasons for domestic fights.
Secondly
,
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people
miss
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important
informal communication that happens over tea in the office.
For example
, they may not
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get
to hear about new vacancies that have arisen in the workplace. This can result in
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frustration and
they might take this out on their
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family
members.

To conclude
, although
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working
from home provides one with the convenience of
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working
at any
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time
and the opportunity to spend more
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time
with
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family
I believe it can lead to tense situations at home
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because
of lack of set
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rules
and the chance to socialize with co-workers. Do you have an essay on this topic? Submit it below in the comments for a free band score
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estimate
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay More and more people are working at home rather than in the workplace. Some people say this will bring benefits to the workers and their families, others think this will bring stress to the home. 1

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
272 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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