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Some people believe that watching television is bad for children Other people believe that watching television is educational for children Which opinion do you agree with and why Give specific details and examples in your answer v.1

Some people believe that watching television is bad for children Other people believe that watching television is educational for children Which opinion do you agree with and why Give specific details and examples in your answer v. 1
Nowadays television has been a part of children entertainment. Some people consider that TV watching has the negative influence to child, while the others think that children can get educational information through the television. Personally, I agree that the TV brings big amount of bad impacts to children development, the both views will be discussed in this essay. As the bad addiction waching TV is a widespread problem between the parent. Children TV shows, films and etc. restrict children abilities, such as using the imagination, ideas, intellection. According to scientific researches it was proven that watching TV has been established the beginning of some psychological diseases which the core reason was the TV addiction. For instance, the local newspaper staff provided the survey between the parents who have the children between 4-10 ages in order to analyse their oponion regards to TV watching. The result of inteviews show that major part of interviewers complained about TV watching, also they added that spending a lot of time in front of TV distracted children from education and over the time the children will become unlearned. All above described reasons approve that avoiding the tv watching leads to successful future for children. On the other hand, there are some evidences in favor of TV watching for children development. It is scientifically approve that some children films, cartoons effect children in proper way and help them to become kind, polite even motivated them to love science, studing and etc. Nowadays the educational TV programs and shows have been established and maintained by procuders and these type of programs are popoular between the children and parents. For example, children can discover interesting topics according to their understanding level from TV programs, however the parents should keep under control and limit the time and type of waching TV programs. In conclusion, after discussed both views it is clearly seen that prohibit the watching TV brings a lot of benefits rather than allow the children watch the TV.
Nowadays television has been a part of
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children
entertainment.
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Some
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people
consider that TV watching has the
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negative
influence to child, while the others
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think
that
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children
can
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get
educational information through the television.
Personally
, I
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agree
that the TV brings
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big
amount of
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bad
impacts to
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children
development, the both views will
be discussed
in this essay.

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As
the
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bad
addiction
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waching
TV is a widespread problem between the
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parent
.
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Children
TV
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shows
, films
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and etc
. restrict
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children
abilities, such as using the imagination,
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ideas
, intellection. According to scientific researches it
was proven
that watching TV has
been established
the beginning of
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some
psychological diseases which the core reason was the TV addiction.
For instance
, the local newspaper staff provided the survey between the
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parents
who have the
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children
between 4-10 ages in order to
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analyse
their
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oponion
regards to TV watching. The result of
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inteviews
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show
that major part of interviewers complained about TV watching,
also
they
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added
that spending
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a lot of
time in front of TV distracted
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children
from education and over the time the
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children
will become unlearned. All above
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described
reasons approve that avoiding the
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tv
watching leads to successful future for children.

On the other hand
, there are
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some
evidences in favor of TV watching for
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children
development. It is
scientifically
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approve
that
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some
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children
films, cartoons effect
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children
in proper way and
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help
them to become kind, polite even motivated them to
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love
science,
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studing
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and etc
. Nowadays the educational TV programs and
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shows
have
been established
and maintained by
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procuders
and these type of programs are
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popoular
between the
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children
and
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parents
.
For example
,
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children
can discover interesting topics according to their understanding level from TV programs,
however
the
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parents
should
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keep
under control and limit the time and type of
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waching
TV programs.

In conclusion
, after discussed both views it is
clearly
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seen
that prohibit the watching TV brings
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a lot of
benefits
rather
than
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allow
the
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children
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watch
the TV.
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18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people believe that watching television is bad for children Other people believe that watching television is educational for children Which opinion do you agree with and why Give specific details and examples in your answer v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
331 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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