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TOEFL essay: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? There is nothing that young people can teach older people. Use specific reasons and details to support your opinion. v.4

TOEFL essay: There is nothing that young people can teach older people. Use specific reasons and details to support your opinion. v. 4
It is an undeniable fact that learning is a never-ending process, people can learn at any age of life. Elder people have more knowledge and real life experiences; however, it is not true that there is nothing that younger people can teach older people. I disagree with the statement for the several reasons. The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that youngsters are more talented, creative, optimistic, enthusiastic and knowledgeable. Indeed, younger people spend majority of time in schools, libraries, in front of computers and with friends so they gather handful of new information. Whereas, older people are time bound as they have several things to do for living and do not have time to learn from the outside sources. In this scenario, a younger person can share information with elders. For instance, few days back, my fifteen years old nephew came across a new information of H1N1 virus like how this virus spread infection in the communities and it causes deadly disease. Grandparents were not aware about this kind of new virus, hence, my nephew explained him how to take care of our self by avoiding exposure to the public places, and he shared knowledge about signs and symptoms of the virus. Another reason that deserves some words is that youngsters are more technologically advanced and quick learners. Apparently, elders prefer to stick with their old habits and old ways of doing work. Youngsters can teach elder people how to do quick and efficient work with new technology and can save ample of time. Few years back, when I was twelve years old, my father was doing all calculation of his business in to the manual calculator and it took him hours to complete it. One day, I taught him how to use a Microsoft Excel to complete all math work with high accuracy. In the beginning, he became confused a lot, but eventually he learned it. Moreover, I always see teenager students teaching smartphones to their parents. Therefore, older people cannot beat youngsters in the technological usage. Finally, younger people are open-minded and can easily adopt new culture and environment. In the mold-able and fragile age, youngsters can adopt any new style and fashion. In contrast, the older people are very narrow-minded and easily cannot accept new ways of life. Actually, elders have orthodox thinking, which resist them to adopt new things, which is very different from their own culture. A vivid example can be given to shed light on the subject is my own experience. In my country India, older people do not believe in inter-cast love marriage and believe its opposite of our religion believes. Thus, elders should learn moral values from youngers. To warp up, I firmly believe that there are several things, which can be taught by youngsters to older people like new information, technology usage and moral values.
It is an undeniable fact that learning is a never-ending process,
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people
can learn at any age of life.
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Elder
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people
have more knowledge and real life experiences;
however
, it is not true that there is nothing that
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younger
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people
can teach
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older
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people
. I disagree with the statement for the several reasons.

The
first
exquisite point to
be mentioned
is that youngsters are more talented, creative, optimistic, enthusiastic and knowledgeable.
Indeed
,
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younger
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people
spend
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majority of
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time
in schools, libraries, in front of computers and with friends
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so
they gather handful of
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new
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information
. Whereas,
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older
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people
are
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time
bound as they have several things to do for living and do not have
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time
to learn from the outside sources. In this scenario, a
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younger
person can share
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information
with
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elders
.
For instance
, few days back, my fifteen years
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old
nephew came across a
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new
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information
of H1N1 virus like how this virus spread infection in the communities and it causes deadly disease. Grandparents were not aware about this kind of
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new
virus,
hence
, my nephew
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explained
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him
how to take care of our self by avoiding exposure to the public places, and he shared knowledge about signs and symptoms of the virus.

Another reason that deserves
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some
words is that youngsters are more
technologically
advanced and quick learners.
Apparently
,
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elders
prefer to stick with their
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old
habits and
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old
ways of doing work. Youngsters can teach
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elder
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people
how to do quick and efficient work with
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new
technology and can save ample of
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time
. Few years back, when I was twelve years
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old
, my father was doing all calculation of his business in to the manual calculator and it took him hours to complete it. One day, I taught him how to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
a Microsoft Excel to complete all math work with high accuracy. In the beginning, he became confused a lot,
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but
eventually
he learned it.
Moreover
, I always
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see
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teenager
students teaching smartphones to their parents.
Therefore
,
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older
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people
cannot beat youngsters in the technological usage.

Finally
,
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younger
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people
are open-minded and can
easily
adopt
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new
culture and environment. In the mold-able and fragile age, youngsters can adopt any
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new
style and fashion.
In contrast
, the
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older
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people
are
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very
narrow-minded and
easily
cannot accept
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new
ways of life. Actually,
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elders
have orthodox thinking, which resist them to adopt
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new
things, which is
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very
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different
from their
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own
culture. A vivid example can be
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given
to shed light on the subject is my
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own
experience. In my country India,
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older
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people
do not
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believe
in inter-cast
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love
marriage and
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believe
its opposite of our religion
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believes
.
Thus
,
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elders
should learn moral values from
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youngers
.

To warp up, I
firmly
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believe
that there are several things, which can
be taught
by youngsters to
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older
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people
like
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new
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information
, technology usage and moral values.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
53Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
It is astonishing how much enjoyment one can get out of a language that one understands imperfectly.
Basil Lanneau Gildersleeve

IELTS essay TOEFL essay: There is nothing that young people can teach older people. Use specific reasons and details to support your opinion. v. 4

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
476 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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