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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Watching television is bad for children. Use specific details and examples to support your answer. v.103

Watching television is bad for children. Use specific details and examples to support your answer. v. 103
It has been argued by many that the provision of personal data to the software companies for the activation of product has increased tremendously. In my opinion, this practice has more advantages than disadvantages as the people will be using a licensed product and there will be a proper implementation of consumer rights. On the one hand, with the advancements, new technology applications are being launched on the internet for the facilitation of the population. Almost all of these require personal information for launching and providing full services as companies want to sale a registered product to the customer. This will build their trust in the users as well as increase the sale of the item. Moreover, the market of pirated things will be at a loss. For example, the Microsoft has launched its windows in the whole world and earned a lot of revenue, but they have sold all these to the registered users only. On the other hand, the sale of any software object to an authentic person has given birth to a new concept of consumer rights. Firstly, its the duty of the company to provide the best item. Secondly, the data shared by the individuals has to be kept secret. Furthermore, the users have the obligation to use it by themselves only and the sharing or transferring is prohibited. Thus, such laws give protection to both the seller and the buyer with an added advantage of a healthy economic competition. For instance, the UK government has implemented these rules in true letter and spirit for the uplift of the local market. To conclude, I believe that by sharing own information with the IT company has no harm as it's done for the better outcome of the services.
It has
been argued
by
many
that the provision of personal data to the software
companies
for the activation of product has increased
tremendously
. In my opinion, this practice has more advantages than disadvantages as the
people
will be using a licensed product and there will be a proper implementation of consumer rights.

On the one hand, with the advancements, new technology applications are
being launched
on the internet for the facilitation of the population. Almost all of these require personal information for launching and providing full services as
companies
want to sale a registered product to the customer. This will build their trust in the users
as well
as increase the sale of the item.
Moreover
, the market of pirated things will be at a loss.
For example
, the Microsoft has launched its windows in the whole world and earned
a lot of
revenue,
but
they have sold all these to the registered users
only
.

On the other hand
, the sale of any software object to an authentic person has
given
birth to a new concept of consumer rights.
Firstly
,
its
the duty of the
company
to provide the best item.
Secondly
, the data shared by the individuals
has to
be
kept
secret.
Furthermore
, the users have the obligation to
use
it by themselves
only
and the sharing or transferring
is prohibited
.
Thus
, such laws give protection to both the seller and the buyer with an
added
advantage of a healthy economic competition.
For instance
, the UK
government
has implemented these
rules
in true letter and spirit for the uplift of the local market.

To conclude
, I believe that by sharing
own
information with the IT
company
has no harm as it's done for the better outcome of the services.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Watching television is bad for children. Use specific details and examples to support your answer. v. 103

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
291 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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