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Some people believe that using animals to test the safety of human medicines is cruel and unwarranted, whereas others feel it is a medical necessity. Discuss both views and state your own opinion. v.1

Some people believe that using animals to test the safety of human medicines is cruel and unwarranted, whereas others feel it is a medical necessity. v. 1
There is no doubt that medicines and other products are usually tested on animals before they are permitted to use by human. While I believe that animal testing is morally wrong, this essay would have to support the necessity of animal experimentation for the development purposes. On the one hand, there are clear ethical arguments against animal experimentation. To illustrate this, laboratory mice is given an illness to investigate a new drug’s effects which can be measured. Opponents of this view discuss that, humans do not have any right to abuse animals to this kind of researches, and that the lives of all creatures should be respected. They believe that the benefits to humans do not justify the suffering caused, and that scientists should use alternative methods of research. On the other hand, the reliable alternatives should be considered instead of animal experimentation. Advocates of using animals in medical development argue that a certain number of suffering on the part of mice or rats can be justified if human lives are saved. They illustrate that opponents of such research might feel differently if a member of their own families needed a medical treatment that had been developed using animal experimentation. Generally, I believe that banning of animal testing for non-medical products is necessary, but I think that it may be vital where new drugs and medical procedures are concerned. In conclusion, it seems that it would be wrong to ban testing on animals for vital medical research until equally effective alternatives have been developed.
There is no doubt that medicines and other products are
usually
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tested
on
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animals
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before
they
are permitted
to
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use
by
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human
. While I believe that
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animal
testing is
morally
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wrong
, this essay would
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have to
support the necessity of
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animal
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experimentation
for the development purposes.

On the one hand, there are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
ethical arguments against
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animal
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
experimentation
. To illustrate this, laboratory mice is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
an illness to investigate a new drug’s effects which can
be measured
. Opponents of this view discuss that,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
humans
do not have any right to abuse
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
to this kind of researches, and that the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
of all creatures should
be respected
. They believe that the benefits to
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humans
do not justify the suffering caused, and that scientists should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
alternative methods of research.

On the other hand
, the reliable alternatives should
be considered
instead
of
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animal
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
experimentation
. Advocates of using
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animals
in
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medical
development argue that a certain number of suffering on the part of mice or rats can
be justified
if
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human
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
are saved
. They illustrate that opponents of such research might feel
differently
if a member of their
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own
families needed a
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medical
treatment that had
been developed
using
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animal
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
experimentation
.
Generally
, I believe that banning of
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animal
testing for non-medical products is necessary,
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but
I
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think
that it may be vital where new drugs and
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medical
procedures
are concerned
.

In conclusion
, it seems that it would be
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wrong
to ban testing on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
for vital
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
medical
research until
equally
effective alternatives have
been developed
.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people believe that using animals to test the safety of human medicines is cruel and unwarranted, whereas others feel it is a medical necessity. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
254 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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