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Several languages are in danger of extinction because they are spoken by very small numbers of people. Some people say that governments should spend public money on saving these languages, while others believe that would be a waste of money. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. v.1

Several languages are in danger of extinction because they are spoken by very small numbers of people. Some people say that governments should spend public money on saving these languages, while others believe that would be a waste of money. v. 1
It is true that some minority languages may disappear in the near future. Although it can be argued that governments could save money by allowing this to happen, I believe that these languages should be protected and preserved. There are several reasons why saving minority languages could be seen as a waste of money. Firstly, if a language is only spoken by a small number of people, expensive education programmes will be needed to make sure that more people learn it, and the state will have to pay for facilities, teachers and marketing. This money might be better spent on other public services. Secondly, it would be much cheaper and more efficient for countries to have just one language. Governments could cut all kinds of costs related to communicating with each minority group. Despite the above arguments, I believe that governments should try to preserve languages that are less widely spoken. A language is much more than simply a means of communication; it has a vital connection with the cultural identity of the people who speak it. If a language disappears, a whole way of life will disappear with it, and we will lose the rich cultural diversity that makes societies more interesting. By spending money to protect minority languages, governments can also preserve traditions, customs and behaviors that are part of a country’s history. In conclusion, it may save money in the short term if we allow minority languages to disappear, but in the long term this would have an extremely negative impact on our cultural heritage.
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governments
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by allowing this to happen, I believe that these
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languages
should
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and preserved.

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minority
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languages
could be
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seen
as a waste of
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money
.
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language
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only
spoken by a
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small
number of
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sure that more
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have to
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money
might be better spent on other public services.
Secondly
, it would be much cheaper and more efficient for countries to have
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.
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could
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all kinds of costs related to communicating with each
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minority
group.

Despite the above arguments, I believe that
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governments
should try to preserve
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languages
that are less
widely
spoken. A
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language
is much more than
simply
a means of communication; it has a vital connection with the cultural identity of the
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people
who speak it. If a
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language
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disappears
, a whole way of life will
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disappear
with it, and we will lose the rich cultural diversity that
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makes
societies more interesting. By spending
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money
to protect
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minority
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languages
,
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governments
can
also
preserve traditions, customs and behaviors that are part of a country’s history.

In conclusion
, it may save
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money
in the short term if we
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allow
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minority
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languages
to
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disappear
,
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but
in the long term this would have an
extremely
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impact on our cultural heritage.
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I am always sorry when any language is lost, because languages are the pedigrees of nations.
Samuel Johnson

IELTS essay Several languages are in danger of extinction because they are spoken by very small numbers of people. Some people say that governments should spend public money on saving these languages, while others believe that would be a waste of money. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
258 words
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