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Some people believe that using animals to test the safety of human medicines is cruel and unwarrented, whereas others feel it is a medical necessity. Discuss both views and state your own opinion. v.1

Some people believe that using animals to test the safety of human medicines is cruel and unwarrented, whereas others feel it is a medical necessity. v. 1
In some countries, many people promote students to take a one year gap for working or travelling after graduating from high school and before entering a university. There are several pros and cons of having a break for students who do this. On the one hand, when young people decide to work or travel for a year after high school graduation, they may gain lots of experience. In other words, this break may be a golden opportunity for their future life. For instance, when students decide to travel for one year, they may learn about different cultures and discover new places. In this way, they can easily widen their mind. Moreover, if they work in that period, they may prepare themselves for business life in an early period. Furthermore, they can decide their university subject by their experience. On the other hand, there are some drawbacks of having a break between high school education and university study. As it is well known that the first and foremost thing is time in our world. In other words, there is a big competition among other students and students should be as fast as possible to be successful. They may lose their valuable time if they have a break for one year. Time is money and students should immediately enter the university to achieve their goals. Moreover, an education gap may reduce their concentration and lower their success. Furthermore, they can have time to travel and work while they are studying at university. In this way, students can use their time efficiently. In conclusion, although there are some advantages of having a break between high school and university education for young people, it also has some drawback for students' future.
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who do this.

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decide to work or travel for a
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graduation, they may gain lots of experience. In
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words, this
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may be a golden opportunity for their future life.
For instance
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decide to travel for one
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, they may learn about
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different
cultures and discover new places. In this way, they can
easily
widen their mind.
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Furthermore
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university
subject by their experience.

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hand, there are
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drawbacks of having a
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education and
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study. As it is well known that the
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and foremost thing is
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time
in our world. In
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words, there is a
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competition among
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should be as
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as possible to be successful. They may lose their valuable
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if they have a
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for one
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.
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is money and
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to achieve their goals.
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reduce
their concentration and lower their success.
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time
to travel and work while they are studying at
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university
. In this way,
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can
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efficiently
.

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advantages of having a
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education for young
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IELTS essay Some people believe that using animals to test the safety of human medicines is cruel and unwarrented, whereas others feel it is a medical necessity. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
287 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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