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Some people believe that using animals to test the safety of human medicines is cruel and unwarranted whereas others feel it is a medical necessity Discuss both views and state your own opinion v.2

Some people believe that using animals to test the safety of human medicines is cruel and unwarranted whereas others feel it is a medical necessity 2
Some folks claim that with the globalization of our world, we can choose between more options than before. I agree with this subject due to the fact of online shopping and various ways of transportation lead to this variety of choices that we have. In this essay, I will debate both of those mentioned factors. On the one hand, without any hesitation, the invention of the internet totally changed our world and brings mankind closer to each other. One of the main services that the internet provide is the range of online shops that you can select between them despite this fact that whether it is close to your house or not. For example, one of the successful shops among them is Amazon, that becomes a billion-dollar company, besides that, it gives you a lot of elections from different countries to select. So, it is inevitable that online shops changed our lifestyle and give us a lot of options. On the other hand, one of the main reasons for this diversity of options is the range of transportation means. After the industrial revolution that leads to the usage of trains and ships in more efficient way, it changed the world in a lot of ways that we have not seen before. Furthermore, it makes it much easier to ship cargo from different countries to other territories. For instance, you can buy a Colombian coffee when you are sitting in a flat in London. So, the change in the transportation methods conveyed to a variety of options. In conclusion, without any doubt, those two factors that I mentioned in my paper, caused a lot of options to select among them that we have nowadays.
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. I
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with this subject due to the fact of online shopping and various ways of transportation lead to this variety of choices that we have. In this essay, I will debate both of those mentioned factors.

On the one hand, without any hesitation, the invention of the internet
totally
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changed
our world and brings mankind closer to each other. One of the main services that the internet provide is the range of online shops that you can select between them despite this fact that whether it is close to your
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house
or not.
For example
, one of the successful shops among them is Amazon, that becomes a billion-dollar
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company
,
besides
that, it gives you a
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lot
of elections from
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different
countries to select.
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So
, it is inevitable that online shops
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changed
our lifestyle and give us a
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lot
of options.

On the other hand
, one of the main reasons for this diversity of options is the range of transportation means. After the industrial revolution that leads to the usage of trains and ships in more efficient way, it
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changed
the world in a
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lot
of ways that we have not
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seen
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before
.
Furthermore
, it
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makes
it much easier to ship cargo from
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different
countries to other territories.
For instance
, you can
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buy
a Colombian coffee when you are sitting in a flat in London.
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So
, the
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change
in the transportation methods conveyed to a variety of options.

In conclusion
, without any doubt, those two factors that I mentioned in my paper, caused a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lot
of options to select among them that we have nowadays.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that using animals to test the safety of human medicines is cruel and unwarranted whereas others feel it is a medical necessity 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
283 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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