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Some people believe that university students are required to attend the classes. Others hold the view that going to classes should be optional for students. v.1

Some people believe that university students are required to attend the classes. Others hold the view that going to classes should be optional for students. v. 1
On the other hand, in some situations attending classes should not be mandatory. For example, students may be absent because of sickness, jobs, family needs or the necessity to take care of children or the urgent need to be in a different place during the class time. Some of the students are forced to work and sometimes the work hours come across the class hours. For the benefits of those students, attending classes at the university level should be voluntary. Many people believe that university education is quite different than pre-university level education. Students in university level are quite matured and they should be free to learn things they way they prefer- be it classrooms, library, the internet or some other sources. To sum up, different views exist in regards to class attendance by university students. However, in my opinion, it is more beneficial for students to attend classes which will eventually help them to increase their knowledge, read more, learn more and, definitely, it will help them to prepare for their future career.
On the other hand
, in
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situations attending
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classes
should not be mandatory.
For example
,
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may be absent
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because
of sickness, jobs, family needs or the necessity to take care of children or the urgent need to be in a
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different
place during the
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time.
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Some of the
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are forced
to work and
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sometimes
the work hours
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come
across the
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class
hours. For the benefits of those
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, attending
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classes
at the
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university
level should be voluntary.
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believe that
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education is quite
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than
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pre-university
level education.
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Students
in
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level are quite
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matured and
they should be free to learn things they way they prefer- be it classrooms, library, the internet or
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other sources.

To sum up,
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views exist
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in regards to
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attendance by
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university
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students
.
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students
to attend
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classes
which will
eventually
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help
them to increase their knowledge, read more, learn more and, definitely, it will
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help
them to prepare for their future career.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
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5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that university students are required to attend the classes. Others hold the view that going to classes should be optional for students. v. 1

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
174 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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