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Some people believe that university students should be required to attend classes. Others believe that going to classes should be optional for students. Which point of view do you agree with? v.3

Some people believe that university students should be required to attend classes. Others believe that going to classes should be optional for students. Which point of view do you agree with? v. 3
There is a strong opinion that students must visit lessons at university or school, which is being questioned by other people who sure that it should be an optional choice. From my point of view students have to go to university in order to attend classes. I feel this way for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay. Firstly, I strongly believe that it is a great opportunity to gain knowledge. One should note here that professors and lecturers explain new topics for people very accurate and it allows them to convey only the most important information. Consequently, listeners are able to understand the main ideas and processes that are explained and obtain benefits from this. What is more, this way allows students interact with teachers, so they can receive an immediate answer on a question which will be able to clarify some vague aspects of a problem. Finally, teens can be taught how to face and solve problems at work in their future lives. Secondly, the other marked advantage is developing in communication skills. There is no doubt that nowadays a lot of employees work in teams or order to do their job better. The great example of such company is a software-developing firm. Teams there consist of different people with various skills that devise a particular project together. At universities boys and girls do the same things. For instance, some subjects at higher schools include group assignments that force people to work together and to find solutions to problems and ways to avoid conflicts. As a result, communication abilities become better, they broaden people’s minds and teach how to speak and build speeches correctly. In conclusion, I am of the opinion that it is a very important for students to attend classes at universities. This is because there they obtain valuable knowledge and skills for their future specialities.
There is a strong opinion that
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students
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must
visit lessons at
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university
or school, which is
being questioned
by other
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people
who sure that it should be an optional choice. From my point of view
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students
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have to
go to
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university
in order to attend classes. I feel this way for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.

Firstly
, I
strongly
believe that it is a great opportunity to gain knowledge. One should note here that professors and lecturers
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explain
new topics for
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people
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very
accurate and it
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allows
them to convey
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only
the most
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important
information.
Consequently
, listeners are able to understand the main
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ideas
and processes that are
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explained
and obtain benefits from this.
What is more
, this way
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allows
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students
interact with teachers,
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so
they can receive an immediate answer on a question which will be able to clarify
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some
vague aspects of a problem.
Finally
, teens can
be taught
how to face and solve problems at work in their future
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lives
.

Secondly
, the other marked advantage is developing in communication
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skills
. There is no doubt that nowadays
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a lot of
employees work in teams or order to do their job better. The great example of such
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company
is a software-developing firm. Teams there consist of
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different
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people
with various
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skills
that devise a particular project together. At
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universities
boys and girls do the same things.
For instance
,
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some
subjects at higher schools include group assignments that force
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people
to work together and to find solutions to problems and ways to avoid conflicts.
As a result
, communication abilities become better, they broaden
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people’s
minds and teach how to speak and build speeches
correctly
.

In conclusion
, I am of the opinion that it is a
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very
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important
for
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students
to attend classes at
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universities
. This is
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because
there they obtain valuable knowledge and
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skills
for their future specialities.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that university students should be required to attend classes. Others believe that going to classes should be optional for students. Which point of view do you agree with? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
313 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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