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Some people believe that universities should only accept students with high marks. Others think that students of all ages and ability levels should be able to attend universities. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.1

Some people believe that universities should only accept students with high marks. Others think that students of all ages and ability levels should be able to attend universities. v. 1
Education is a very much needed exigency part of our life. If children or youngsters do not get a good education, it will be devastating to their lives. Whether or not children should receive homework every day is a matter of debate. Some people believe that children should get homework every day from school and on the other hand, some people believe that children should not get too much homework from the academy. Both views will be discussed in this essay before concluding. Firstly, we must understand the concept of homework. The teacher is not able to cover a full course in institute so that they give an assignment to children. Furthermore, most of the students are not doing their homework unless it is necessary, so it is important to give them homework. Moreover, some subjects need practice. For example, science, mathematics, and art need constant practice, if they do not, it is very difficult to understand for them. By giving homework it automatically helps to improve. Practice makes perfect. However, it is important to give homework to youngsters, but children spend 7-8 hours at an institution, after institute if a teacher gives too much homework, it pressurizes many children. Besides this, when the children get too much homework, they are not able to do any other physical activity which is also important in their lives. And it is also caused to depreciation. In my opinion, the concept of homework is not harmful. The problem arises when a teacher gives too much homework and when a student fails to use their time wisely. For example, if the deadline for a specific assignment is after 2 weeks, most students would leave it until the very last minute and by doing this they are putting themselves under unwanted pressure. In conclusion, I think children should get homework for their improvement.
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education, it will be devastating to their
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should receive
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every day is a matter of debate.
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believe that
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every day from school and
on the other hand
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believe that
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should not
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too
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from the academy. Both views will
be discussed
in this essay
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concluding.

Firstly
, we
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understand the concept of
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. The teacher is not able to cover a full course in institute
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so
that they
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give
an assignment to
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children
.
Furthermore
, most of the students are not doing their
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homework
unless it is necessary,
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it is
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to
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them
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.
Moreover
,
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subjects need practice.
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, science, mathematics, and art need constant practice, if they do not, it is
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difficult to understand for them. By giving
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it
automatically
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to
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. Practice
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perfect.

However
, it is
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to
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to youngsters,
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children
spend 7-8 hours at an institution, after institute if a teacher
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too
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much
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, it pressurizes
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children
.
Besides
this, when the
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children
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too
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much
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, they are not able to do any other physical activity which is
also
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important
in their
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lives
. And it is
also
caused to depreciation.

In my opinion, the concept of
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homework
is not harmful. The problem arises when a teacher
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gives
too
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much
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homework
and when a student fails to
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use
their time
wisely
.
For example
, if the deadline for a specific assignment is after 2 weeks, most students would
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leave
it until the
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last minute and by doing this they are putting themselves under unwanted pressure.

In conclusion
, I
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think
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children
should
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homework
for their improvement.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that universities should only accept students with high marks. Others think that students of all ages and ability levels should be able to attend universities. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
308 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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