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Some people believe that universities shold only accept students with the highest marks while others believe that some students with low marks should have an opportunity. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

Some people believe that universities shold only accept students with the highest marks while others believe that some students with low marks should have an opportunity. v. 1
Currently, many students are worried about entering universities thinking about the election program. Some people believe that the election company should accept only excellent students at their university, I give my vote to that group of people who think that other factors need to be taken into account. On the one hand, for starters it’s worth noting that Rather than filling spots with well-rounded students, many colleges, particularly selective ones, seek to identify a mix of applicants who show a passion and very deep talent in an area or two, and because of this they accept candidates according to the criteria of an excellent average mark. Although the quality of a leader will help ensure the effectiveness of learning, ideal students have a higher perception of material. For instance, by adhering to the introductory program at the best university in the world - Harvard, exclusively professional students are able to study at this higher education institution. Additionally, No matter how selective the university is, student grades will probably matter most. In put more precisely, Admissions officers place a high value on student's academic transcript as an indicator of how prepared students are for college work. As a result, excellent students will ensure the prosperity of the university. On the other hand, I agree that the election program should give a chance to those who do not have an ideal average score. Firstly, Admission counselors consider a worthy candidate to be one who looks beyond the bounds of an assessment of evidence of leadership and individual value. In other words, it is important for universities to have students who will make special programs that will improve the effectiveness of training. Even if academic preparedness talks about college preparedness, responsibility and leadership will push the university forward on a rating scale. To illustrate, At Roanoke College, it receives about 5, 500 applications each year and accepts about 72% of the candidates, because it is always looking for the potential and diversity of students. Secondly, Institutional priorities could also include finding students with exceptional talent in art, music or athletics or filling department-specific needs. Such a so-called holistic approach to admissions can work to the advantage of those who understand it and present their strengths accordingly. Thus, due to the life or creative skills of students, it will be more interesting to study at universities. In conclusion, taking into account the opinion of a group of people, it can be concluded that only those with an excellent certificate should be accepted into universities, but I believe that in real life the selection committee should be based on skills and give chances to everyone.
Currently
,
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many
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students
are worried
about entering
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universities
thinking about the election
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program
.
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Some
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people
believe that the election
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company
should accept
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only
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excellent
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students
at their
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university
, I give my vote to that group of
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people
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who
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think
that other factors need to
be taken
into account.

On the one hand, for starters it’s worth noting that
Rather
than filling spots with well-rounded
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students
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
 colleges,
particularly
selective ones, seek to identify a mix of applicants
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who
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
a passion and
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very
deep talent in an area or two, and
because of this
they accept candidates according to the criteria of an
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
excellent
average mark. Although the quality of a leader will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
ensure the effectiveness of learning, ideal
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students
have a higher perception of material.
For instance
, by adhering to the introductory
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program
at the best
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university
in the world
Consider using an m-dash if you do not want to join two words.
-
Harvard, exclusively professional
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students
are able to study at this higher education institution.
Additionally
, No matter how selective the
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university
is,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
student
grades will
probably
matter most. In put more
precisely
, Admissions officers place a high value on student's academic transcript as an indicator of how prepared
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
are for college work.
As a result
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
excellent
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
will ensure the prosperity of the university.

On the other hand
, I
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agree
that the election
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
program
should give a chance to those
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who
do not have an ideal average score.
Firstly
, Admission counselors consider a worthy candidate to be one
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who
looks beyond the bounds of an assessment of evidence of leadership and individual value.
In other words
, it is
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important
for
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universities
to have
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students
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who
will
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make
special
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programs
that will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
the effectiveness of training. Even if academic preparedness talks about college preparedness, responsibility and leadership will push the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
university
forward on a rating scale. To illustrate, At Roanoke College, it receives about 5, 500 applications each year and accepts about 72% of the candidates,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
it is always looking for the potential and diversity of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
.
Secondly
, Institutional priorities could
also
include finding
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
with exceptional talent in art, music or athletics or filling department-specific needs. Such a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
-called holistic approach to admissions can work to the advantage of those
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
who
understand it and present their strengths
accordingly
.
Thus
, due to the life or creative
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
, it will be more interesting to study at universities.

In conclusion
, taking into account the opinion of a group of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
, it can
be concluded
that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
those with an
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
excellent
certificate should be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
accepted
into
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universities
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
I believe that in real life the selection committee should
be based
on
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
and give chances to everyone.
18Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people believe that universities shold only accept students with the highest marks while others believe that some students with low marks should have an opportunity. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
439 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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